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Depression: Fingers around My Throat by wordspinner314

Exceptional
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Wow! This certainly deserves a 6. Such a powerful message, so consistently and poetically expressed throughout the poem. The meaning is intriguingly ambiguous, which really adds to the suspense and serves to pull the reader even more strongly into the poem, I think.
Comment Written by Tatarka2 on 18-Oct-2015
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Left Behind by P1

Exceptional
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This gets a 6 from me because the emotion was so brilliantly portrayed and so consistent throughout the poem. I can't think of a single suggestion for change. I think this is a very strong entry in this contest.
Comment Written by Tatarka2 on 18-Oct-2015
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Nevaeh by Aiona
Chapter 28 of the book Aiona's Poems

Excellent
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Heart-stopping. My only suggestion would be to perhaps re-think the first line. The conversational, questioning tone seems too colloquial for the intensity of this riveting poem. Just my opinion.
Comment Written by Tatarka2 on 18-Oct-2015
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Exhilaration by JanPerry
Chapter 78 of the book Jan's Poetry Collection

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I thought this was a beautiful poem, which captures this evanescent emotion so perfectly. The rhyming flowed well throughout, I thought. Congratulations on a strong entry.
Comment Written by Tatarka2 on 18-Oct-2015
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Circles by Nan Beeson

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I think you mean "rapacious." Anyway, while I applaud the message, I think this poem needs to be edited, and a lot tighter. The message you expressed in the introduction would also be beautiful as a poem, I think. The word "Gobbledygook." for instance, seems out of place in this very serious, spiritual poem. I would suggest trying a poem about the "balls" and "circles" to which you allude in your introduction.
Comment Written by Tatarka2 on 18-Oct-2015

Before the Dawn by ginnorm

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This was a lovely poem that so beautifully reflects this time of day. My only suggestion would be that the rhyming feels a little "forced." For instance, the line "I know that the sun will bother seems written just to rhyme, rather than being an integrated part of the poem itself.
Comment Written by Tatarka2 on 18-Oct-2015

First Frost by RodG

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I really liked this one, and I think it's a very strong entry in this contest. In fact, I wish I'd written it. I love the use of alliteration throughout, and I thought it rhymed smoothly
Comment Written by Tatarka2 on 18-Oct-2015
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

End of an Era by lancellot

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This seems like what Hefner would be thinking, doesn't it? This was, I thought, an excellent entry - using an iconic figure whom we all know, and imagining his thoughts as his life comes to a close.
Comment Written by Tatarka2 on 18-Oct-2015
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Taken by Surprise--Part 7 of 9 by jpduck

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Great use of dialogue with a spare, smoothly flowing writing style. The story was formatted in a way that made it more readable, and thus more enjoyable. I would suggest using some kind of segue between the two diaries, rather than explaining the stories in the author's notes - or maybe an introduction to the piece itself
Comment Written by Tatarka2 on 18-Oct-2015

So love is born by kiwisteveh

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I thought this poem expressed a lovely sentiment so beautifully = and it was an octogram, too! The picture was perfect with. Great job!
Comment Written by Tatarka2 on 18-Oct-2015


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