When I review other people's writing I like to comment on what you did well and if possible I comment on what I think you might have done better so please don't take my comment personal.
Requirement: As far as I can tell this meets the requirement of the rules
What I liked: I think this is good but needs a little work
What could be improved: In the second line I might would change the order to
The blame, her anger, and the pain such hate.
In the 3rd line I am not sure Gang should be Captilize
in the fifth line I might change it to
He did his time in prison; He had to pay.
Between line 6 and 7 the flow is not consistant
in line nine I might change it to
Although she thought she was helping there was more
in line eleven I might say
When asked to visit him, they found a shut door
Good Luck in the contest
Comment Written by mrmorris69 on 29-Feb-2016
Read and reviewed with blinders on.