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Constitutional? by Mystic Angel 7777

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Hello, this is hard to say anything about but as usual I think you did a great job. As far as I can tell you met all the rules of the contest. Good luck.
Comment Written by mrmorris69 on 02-Aug-2016

A Writer's Greatest Fear by lancellot

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I think this poem is very well done and I love the black and white theme.
As far as I can tell this meets the rules of the contest.
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written by mrmorris69 on 30-Jul-2016
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Seeing Trees by krys123

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This is very cute. As far as I can tell you have the syllable count correct. I love the picture and the words are a perfect match. If there was any that I would change it would be the title. If it was me I would change to seeing ourselves.

Good Luck in the contest.
Comment Written by mrmorris69 on 03-Mar-2016
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

the dance by judester

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I think you have done a great job on this 5-7-5 poem about trees and as far as I can tell you have met the syllable requirement. However, if this was my entry I would up date the picture to be more treey.

Good Luck with the contest.
Comment Written by mrmorris69 on 03-Mar-2016
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Advice From An Aged by elpsog

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When I review other people's writing I like to comment on what you did well and if possible I comment on what I think you might have done better so please don't take my comment personal.

What I liked: I like the idea of the Aged trying to pass some wisdom on to the next generation. I also think there is wisdom in living in the present

What could be improved: It is a bit hard to read starting from the title. Aged is a verb that you are using as a noun. I might change the title to Wisdom from an Aged Soul-Person-Man. In the 4th line you use the word flit I think you might mean flight. In the 5th line I might leave out (the needs of the). I am not sure the 6th line reads the way you think it does. the same is true for the 8th and 12 th lines. this is an odd rhyming pattern but that may be my lack of knowledge. normally this type of poem is aabb ccdd or abab cdcd. Please don't take my comments personal and if you would like me to read it again just ask.
Comment Written by mrmorris69 on 01-Mar-2016

Finding Mercy by chcbeck

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When I review other people's writing I like to comment on what you did well and if possible I comment on what I think you might have done better so please don't take my comment personal.

Requirement: As far as I can tell this meets the requirement of the rules

What I liked: I think this is good but needs a little work

What could be improved: In the second line I might would change the order to

The blame, her anger, and the pain such hate.

In the 3rd line I am not sure Gang should be Captilize

in the fifth line I might change it to

He did his time in prison; He had to pay.

Between line 6 and 7 the flow is not consistant

in line nine I might change it to

Although she thought she was helping there was more

in line eleven I might say

When asked to visit him, they found a shut door
Good Luck in the contest
Comment Written by mrmorris69 on 29-Feb-2016
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Mercy Is! by Commando

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When I review other people's writing I like to comment on what you did well and if possible I comment on what I think you might have done better so please don't take my comment personal.

Requirement: As far as I can tell this meets the requirement of the rules

What I liked: I think this is very good writing especially the notes thanks for sharing

What could be improved: I think this is just a bit inconsistent in the first verse you talk about mercy is like a small seed but in the next three verses you move away from the seed comparison
Good Luck in the contest
Comment Written by mrmorris69 on 29-Feb-2016
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Quality of Mercy by Chris Walker

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When I review other people's writing I like to comment on what you did well and if possible I comment on what I think you might have done better so please don't take my comment personal.

Requirement: This met the requirement of the rules

What I liked: I think this is very good and not sure I would change anything thanks you for sharing

What could be improved: faith the answer to life's pollution maybe change to faith is the answer to life's pollution
Comment Written by mrmorris69 on 29-Feb-2016
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Which One Will YOU Meet? by frogbook

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This is very cute. I believe the syllable count is correct. However, the rules say no art work. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written by mrmorris69 on 24-Feb-2016
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

There Was A Time by Mystic Angel 7777

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As always an excellent poem and probably favorite free verse. I apologize that I don't have some more to add but it is what it is an excellent poem
Comment Written by mrmorris69 on 19-Feb-2015


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