The Youth of Beauty's Fruit
A Shakespearean Sonnet
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Not Fast Enough by Puzzle

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The endings are an important part of these short pieces and this was a fantastic ending (packed into a great one-liner, "not fast enough"). Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written by Mark Valentine on 28-Mar-2020

The Wordslinger by humpwhistle

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The formula for a winner - 20 words plus rhymes, plus a literary theme, and a clever ending. The title's not bad either. Good luck and hope you're staying safe.
Comment Written by Mark Valentine on 28-Mar-2020

A Hiring -- 1895 by Pantygynt
Chapter 9 of the book The Maid of the Mill

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I especially like Sean's internal dialogue, toward the end of the chapter, where he tries to size up where Hettie falls on the "virgin continuum". I like that part of what attracts him to her is her independent spirit. Looking forward to seeing that story play out.

Lots of technical talk here - the part about Sean "showing his metal" makes me wonder if that is the origin of the saying "to show one's mettle". In any case, next time I buy a bag of flour or corn meal, I'll have an increased appreciation for the labor that went into making it.
Comment Written by Mark Valentine on 26-Mar-2020

Combating Coronavirus by Louise Michelle

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Love the humor here. My favorite line is actually from your author's note, "If they don't, they should."

There are some good lines in the poem as well - dodging the human race seems to be the name of the game at present. Thanks for giving me a smile on this quarantined day.
Comment Written by Mark Valentine on 25-Mar-2020

Who Shot W.W.? -- Conclusion by humpwhistle

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Great ending and great dialogue - "Hell hath no flurry..." laughed out loud at that one. And a very well placed "you know I can hear you, right?" was another high spot.

The characters are like a "Best of Noir" collection - the underworld bosses, the femme fatale, the wise-cracking PI, the ex-boxer - all characters that I can only picture in black-and-white (cuz they don't make movies like that anymore). The indoor phone booth is a nice touch also. Thanks for keeping Noir alive.
Comment Written by Mark Valentine on 24-Mar-2020

Nagged To Death by LisaMay

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A very cute song with an important moral - wives, never nag your husbands. There should be more poems like this. (Though I'm impressed that, in your story, at least the wife helps paint - my wife always says "We should really do...?" and by "we" she means "me" - but I digress.)

Some wonderful rhymes (sofa and loafer among my faves - the bucket one was good also).

Delightful - good luck in the contest.

Comment Written by Mark Valentine on 24-Mar-2020

Poetic Words by Dolly'sPoems

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I like the idea of a poem as a photograph - it captures an image or a moment in time and preserves it - not only for the poet, but for others. I can't count how many times I've "stopped by woods on a snowy evening".

The fact that you wrote this as a sonnet adds to its elegance and beauty.

Love it!
Comment Written by Mark Valentine on 24-Mar-2020

Losing Her Blocks by robyn corum

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One of your best my friend - humor and poignancy all rolled into one really well-written poem. I smiled throughout and then got a bit misty at the penultimate stanza. I like the idea that third grade teachers who tutor saxophone are the best kind of heroes - especially if they're patient enough to wait for their princesses to get through menopause, or whatever it is that puts you guys in "the looney bin"

Maggie has been in the when-did-Prince-Charming-turn-into-this-idiot phase since the late nineties, but I'm thinking she'll snap out of it any day now.

This is one for the shelf.
Comment Written by Mark Valentine on 24-Mar-2020

Tiny Leaf Buds by robyn corum

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That's what we need - a little Robyn to remind us it's spring (see what I did there? ... what's that?... You've heard it before?... Never mind). I like the positive attitude that comes sprouting up in this one (how about that one?,,,the sprouting pun?...Still no?).

Oh well, then I'll simply say, as I look out my window on a snow-covered street, it's a wonderful poem which feeds the optimist in me.
Comment Written by Mark Valentine on 23-Mar-2020

Holidays - a Thing of the Past by Pantygynt

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Self is'lation certainly hasn't dulled your creativity or wit. Feminine or masculine, you're still a top notch rhymer as you demonstrate wonderfully here. Not bad for a se'nty nine year old. Thanks for the end of day smile.
Comment Written by Mark Valentine on 22-Mar-2020


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