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The Writer's Knight by Sandra du Plessis

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What a fun poem! I like that it rhymes and has a pleasant meter. The topic is funny -- sad but true! I like "my thoughts mix like a pot of brew." Although.... does one mix brew? I guess you do. But usually I think of stew when I mix, rather than brew. Brews just kind of..... well..... "brew." You stir a little when you add sugar to your tea or coffee. And brewed beer only mixes in the initial stage. Then it mostly kinda just sits and ferments.

Anyway! Funny poem! I liked it very much!
Comment Written by Aiona on 22-Feb-2020

What He Taught Me ABout Love by Barb Hensongispsaca
Chapter 18 of the book 2020

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You know I don't normally like free verse, Barb, but this poem is very sweet and I read every line. I love how it kind of tracks the progression of a love between two soulmates, until death truly did them part.

One typo:
from each others sight.
I think you meant "other's."
Comment Written by Aiona on 21-Jan-2020

Walk With Me by Barb Hensongispsaca
Chapter 17 of the book 2020

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Heh! I love your rhyming poems, Barb. This one tells a story. Is it a puppy? Or a kitten? I wonder!

I saw a few typos.

Stanza #8 Line 2
'In borrows in the ground.
I think you meant "burrows."

Stanza #8 Line 4
of vegies growing 'round.'
I think you meant "veggies."

Stanza #9 Line 4
cooled of by summer's breeze.'
I think you meant "cooled off."
Comment Written by Aiona on 21-Jan-2020

Her Royal Majesty by Dancemom

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This fits the 5-7-5-7-7 format. I like the alliteration, even internal in the first line. The middle line is the turning of the phase from flying to resting on a flower, linking the two actions together.
Comment Written by Aiona on 21-Jan-2020

Ode To A Hot Flash Fan by susand3022

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Heh! I love this poem. It rhymes. I'm a sucker for rhyming poems. It made me giggle, and that's another thing I love about poems. It also is about a SERIOUS topic!!! It takes skill to make one laugh about a serious topic. Really!
Comment Written by Aiona on 21-Jan-2020

Electroencephalogram by Sandra du Plessis

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Hah! Yes, the first word has 20 letters. Each line is reduced in syllable-count by one. The last line has the same syllables as the title word. So the format is correct. I think the lines do indeed represent the title word well.
Comment Written by Aiona on 21-Jan-2020

Counterrevolutionary by susand3022

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I had to do a lot of counting to review this poem!!!! LOL! The first word does indeed have 20 letters. Each line reduces syllable-count by one. The last line has the same number of syllables as the title word. So the format is correct. As for the words, I only wonder about the last one. Are all counterrevolutionaries men? I guess yes, if you consider man as generic human.
Comment Written by Aiona on 21-Jan-2020

life has many avenues to explore by Mark D. R.

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There's a name for how the middle line joins the first and third line in topic. I can't remember. Anyway, this poem follows the 5-7-5 format, and also has a deeper meaning within - can be a metaphor.
Comment Written by Aiona on 21-Jan-2020

Newfoundland Gets Hammered by Ideasaregems-Dawn
Chapter 18 of the book A Book of Essays

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Interesting piece! I didn't see any typos. I find it interesting that there are some species of pine that germinate better after a fire. Not to mention, the fires clear out underbrush that would deprive a seedling of sunlight. When I worked in the botanical gardens at Berkeley, they were studying plants that absorb heavy metals. Life on Earth will always adapt. Humans always presume that what is bad for them, is bad for Earth. I think George Carlin said it best when he hypothesized that global warming may simply be the Earth putting herself back in balance. Because it makes us uncomfortable, doesn't matter to Mother Earth. She will keep spinning.
Comment Written by Aiona on 21-Jan-2020
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

It Starts With the Truth by kiwigirl2821

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What a sad poem! It follows the 5-7-7 format, and appears to be about a serious topic - how honesty can bring about painful justice, in particular, it sounds like this is involving a relationship between people. This is my first time to hear a "Sade" song. Thanks for the link. Did you know that they are reported to be great in fighting off mating yetis https://www.thebeaverton.com/2018/01/government-urges-people-stay-woods-yeti-mating-season/
Comment Written by Aiona on 21-Jan-2020


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