The Southern Seas part ten
by F. Wehr3
Another great chapter.
I was a little hesitant of the letter in the beginning. It seems too forward, almost like she's throwing herself at him.
I was also curious when Lou gave him the knives. Then when she changed the destination, I guessed that there would be a reason for him to have them. I'll have to wait until next chapter to see if I'm right.
"Tawny was dressed in the same one she'd worn the night the spider interrupted them," I would go with 'Tawney wore the same dress she had the night the spider interrupted them,' 'dressed in the same one' is a little confusing.
"Her smile was warm, welcoming, and inviting." I'd pick either welcoming or inviting.
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Comment Written by Michaelk on 07-Apr-2019
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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
Thanks, Michael. I really appreciate you following along and the suggestions.
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