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Mouse by bdecker

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Very interesting. You use Poetic inquiry to research addiction and recovery. How does it work? I would like to know more. Is the mouse able to escape his fear? Well written poem, it is good that it makes me question.
Comment Written by kittykatnoel on 13-Dec-2017

Shoot 'em all! by Commando

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Good story, the language was perfectly appropriate. I think if you could take out the action in the center about the other guys 'Bill' and "Hill" and just focused on your original story it would have more impact. I would like to see Larry developed more, know more about him and his family and really was his girlfriend prettier than yours? I want to know if he was always the type to throw himself on the grenade for his friends. Keep the story line focused on Larry and action surrounding Larry. Write a separate story about Hill and Bill.
Comment Written by kittykatnoel on 13-Dec-2017

The Metaphysical Experience by Cogitator

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A very interesting and extremely long essay on the metaphysical. I think you could possibly put in a link or a shortened description of the Avatar scenario to aid with readability. I would like to see the various quotes put into a different font to make them stand out from the essay. While reading it took me a second to note that you had switched from your narrative over to quotes from various people to support your stance. I was reminded while reading how both the Pagans and the Christians celebrate christmas, only dedicating their celebration to a slightly different name of their diety. Whether you are worshipping mother earth or the mother god or mother of god, it is all the same and it is all religion.
Comment Written by kittykatnoel on 13-Dec-2017

Chocolate Ghazal by Sis Cat

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I enjoyed the form. I loved learning about the form and how it should be properly executed. I enjoy that you have put references into the poem that I must pause to think about and mull over their meaning and their deeper meaning. I love chocolate and visually tasted the graphic included. Thank you.
Comment Written by kittykatnoel on 13-Dec-2017

Winter--My Love by Jannypan (Jan)

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Nice and short and to the point. I can't tell if you love winter or hate it or maybe both. I hate winter and enjoy all poems that allude to the same. The graphic is also an excellent choice.
Comment Written by kittykatnoel on 13-Dec-2017
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Rhyme by Margaret Snowdon

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Nicely done. You've shown skills in your use of alliteration and end rhyme that make this poem sing. I can hear the birds and the bells as I read through each line.
Comment Written by kittykatnoel on 26-Oct-2017

Have me if you can! by Benny Beeharry

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I really enjoy your use of language, descriptive, rhythmic and beautiful. Your poem even seems to ebb and flow between transcedentalism, christianity and maybe buddhism (I'm not sure), an eastern religion. It is cool. Well done.
Comment Written by kittykatnoel on 03-Aug-2016

Beautiful spinach by Maria Jose Garcia

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Nice job portraying the joy of eating, or the joy of "not" eating as in your baby's case. I have always wondered why people think they have a right to say anything about how someone else raises their child. Good writing.
Comment Written by kittykatnoel on 03-Aug-2016
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

The Lesser Of Two Evils by ExperiencingLiphe

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You have done a great job covering all of the angles. You are not alone in your thoughts, I don't know of a single person who is happy with the choices. How did these people get this far, I've no idea.

You could probably go back through and simplify your sentences to make them easier to read, but your message is loud and clear.
Comment Written by kittykatnoel on 03-Aug-2016
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

A Gaffe Of Dimension by Ulla

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First sentence, do you mean contented rather than "contended"?

This sentence seems sluggish, perhaps try rewording to make it flow more easily-"Amid animated talk and laughter we sat down to a drink, and soon it became time to proceed to the dining room.

Good job, it is a nice piece to read.
Comment Written by kittykatnoel on 03-Aug-2016
Read and reviewed with blinders on.


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