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The girls are back! by alexisleech
Chapter 1 of the book A New Beginning

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Hi Alexis,

Was wondering how you were doing.

Zahir strongly objects to Jasper being referred to as 'it' in the furst para!

Though he says feels this does work to characterize Jenny's inferiority as a dog purrson. He says if the golden retriever is so wonderful, Jenny could sleep in the kitchen herself with it.

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Suggest rephrase a cat radiates ( rather than radiated) so well.

Just check what is the name of Laura's son? I thought it was Michael, not Paul.


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This seems like a good place to start the new novel. I think you definitely made the right choice by rejigging the ending.

Best wishes, Alison

Zahir would not allow me to give you a six, and says Jasper, or the model chosen fur him, looks a fine cat.
Comment Written by Cat of Letters on 03-May-2015

The Vultures by Eric1

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Dear Eric,

A meow to you! I could not give over than a six to this poem in which a will is changed in favour of 'cats who are confined'.

Minor point: sixty-four hyphen

Purrs to you from Zahir - I do hope your poem inspires others to change their wills in favour of cats!

Comment Written by Cat of Letters on 03-May-2015

The Witches of Winteringham by evilynne

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Hi Evi,

Sorry to have missed this in time to vote for it. But at least I can give it a retrospective review.

I love the imagery of the BBQ with the colourful neighbours, in the power outage. Great community spirit.

It is annoying having to ration time on here and try to concentrate on cleaning and packing things into storage - especially since I do not want to be moving at all.

Best wishes, Alison
Comment Written by Cat of Letters on 03-May-2015

Meeting Mr Big by Walu Feral
Chapter 12 of the book The One They Call Feral (poetry)

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Catching up here Fez,

Truly, this is awful - not your poem I mean - what occurred.

This is so disgusting, and so exploitive. I am glad you are writing this book and presenting these awful things that took place to the wider public view.

Best wishes, Alison

Zahir sends you purrs.
Comment Written by Cat of Letters on 03-May-2015

Dancing With Dreams by Annette Gulliver
Chapter 17 of the book LOST IN MYSTERY BAY

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Hi Annette,

Really enjoyed your latest chapter . . . A novel change of career for Rosemary!

Voldka should be a small v. Could not spot any errors apart from this small one.

I am not familiar with the word spruicker and guess it is an Australian term, so it perhaps needs an author's note.

Good to see your novel progressing.

Best wishes, Alison

Comment Written by Cat of Letters on 03-May-2015

Spoken Word by Sis Cat

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Hi Andre,

That is wonderful and most inspiring. I hope this poem reaches the wall flowers who are too afraid to speak and braces their nerve.

I loved the poem, it is highly visual. Can really envision the valiant poets in your lines.

Best wishes, Alison
Comment Written by Cat of Letters on 03-May-2015

The Blame Is Mine by Walu Feral
Chapter 13 of the book The One They Call Feral (poetry)

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Hi Fez,

I am afraid I am behind with reviewing on here, and really want to catch up with your new volume.

Well, I am glad you didn't succeed with your suicide bid, as I imagine all the readers of your wonderful poems are.

Well written, with your usual fine touches of humor, re the Queen's barbwire palace, even in such a grim chapter.

Best wishes, Alison
Comment Written by Cat of Letters on 03-May-2015

Rip Van Winkle Part II by Wabigoon

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Hi again Jeff,

Only have a five to offer, I am afraid.

Yes, it is amazing stuff. An excellent story.

I think you are the spokesperson for an alien implanted humanity.

But do not forget their taint also warps the real god/goddess. And aims to render impure all that is pure.

The mother goddess, mother earth, is/was designed to raise her children in her bosom. Read the stories of Feral from Aus, as I know you do. It may be harsh, rude and primitive, but there is still a compassion, a nurturing.

What came out of the sea at Fucashima was unlike to be purely natural. Just like the Boxing Day tsunami was unlikely to be so. The magnitude of these two earthquakes off coast lines was unthinkable. It is like a weapon being tested.

I suspect we may have a fairly unpleasant alien contingent in our midst. And long have done. Though it makes neither 'Gaia' or the true creator 'God' force of the universe to blame. Intervention on our behalf would be nice indeed. What those who want a Second Coming long for. But is that too simplistic?

Grasping our own place, and role, in the universe, as the human race, is a tough nut right now. We seem to be, as a race, like a teen being flung, reluctantly, out of Mommy and Daddy's basement.

I hope you make a collection of short works out of these fabulous stories. They are truly unique.

Alison
Comment Written by Cat of Letters on 28-Apr-2015

Rip Van Winkle (part I of II) by Wabigoon

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Hi Jeff,

Unique. I have read your part two, your just put out tonight but needed to come back to this.

I don't know if I can critique it properly, beyond some tech suggestions below without going on to Part 2.

Alas, the Chenobyl times whatever is for real, it was not held off. Whatever lies we have been told since.

Anyhow. I shall read on. That's my last six,until Sunday.

Know you can get angst about run on's, but suggest a comma, para one. when her father was at the table writing, in commas.

Suggest another one too, -one after her graduate studio

and a couple more. Another one after the three story house and another after Camp Randall Stadium.

I know by now, that you like, long, flowing uninhibited sentences. In which case your attention to, and alliance with, the humble comma purrhaps become vital.

the side away from Camp Randall (comma)

100 ideas now

a hundred? or at least a 100



From a quick glance (comma)

black smock (comma)



Comma or hallucinated she could see comma


For God's sakes - do you want that a capital or not? I imagine you likely do not, bit I indicate the convention.


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I do think more comma attention is required. I can see you going into the alternative forms of punctuation with the - and the . .. I think these work. But your commas need attention. Losing all form, is no form.

You would not agree that spelling everything wrong was cool, so thus your punctuation must become increasingly sophisticated as you attempt to break form/moulds.

Alison
Comment Written by Cat of Letters on 28-Apr-2015

Why I'm Called Feral by Walu Feral
Chapter 10 of the book The One They Call Feral (poetry)

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A belated review and a meow from Zahir.

We, wondered, in this house why you were called 'Feral'.

I cannot claim, as a cat of pedigree, sold in a pet shop, to be a member of your brave band.

But the barn cats say 'Good on y'mate' though their Australian is lame. They say they would send you shrews and June bugs to breakfast on if they could.

I think there is actually some purrcieved sophistication in eating frogs, or at least their legs, and snails too, in some circles. If you were French, you would be not so feral.

Purrs to you, Zahir
Comment Written by Cat of Letters on 28-Apr-2015


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