My Comments

Exceptional

This work has reached the exceptional level

First paragraph immediately sets the locale.

Very descriptive all the way through.

Touch of a run-on sentence in paragraph five.

In paragraph ten would consider taking the two thens out.

Same in paragraph eleven and beyond.

Definitely a case of being in the wrong place at the wrong time.

High tension and plenty of action throughout.

Comment Written by Brett Matthew West on 22-Feb-2021

Herding the Flock by judiverse

Excellent

Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Is Dpg supposed to be Dog? Good play on words from German Shepherd to sheep herd. Should make an interesting entry in this contest. Too bad the current resident of the White House does not measure up as a shepherd like the dog does.

Comment Written by Brett Matthew West on 20-Feb-2021
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Scene at the Many-world Portal 7 by Bill Schott

Excellent

Touch of humor thrown in for good measure including a dancing indian. What is next? Seems Pons and Ned are at it again. Plenty of action in this one.

Comment Written by Brett Matthew West on 16-Feb-2021

True Love by nancy_e_davis

Excellent

It may be a dark picture, as you state, but it is one you would never get rid of. The strong, emotional, sentiment says all one person needs to say to someone else.

Comment Written by Brett Matthew West on 16-Feb-2021

~ Winds of Discontent ~ by Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Discontent does indeed breed hatred. That appears to be the jest of this Tanka. Good comparison between natural disasters and the winds to illustrate the theme.

Comment Written by Brett Matthew West on 16-Feb-2021

Raindrops by damommy

Excellent

Well crafted and interesting entry for this club event. Especially strong last line ties the poem together. An enjoyable read. A lot conveyed in these seventeen syllables.

Comment Written by Brett Matthew West on 15-Feb-2021

Lessons for Life by Wendy Gordon

Excellent

Sometimes the best and most memorable lessons learned have nothing to do with the subject being taught. Sure your experiences with them are ones not soon forgotten. Interesting read.

Comment Written by Brett Matthew West on 12-Feb-2021

Handsome Threesome by damommy

Excellent

Picture supports the poem. Bit surprising you said this was your first haiku. Would not know that with this quality piece. Well done! Captures the essence of the theme spot on.

Comment Written by Brett Matthew West on 12-Feb-2021

Joy of living by nancy_e_davis

Excellent

Very intriguing. After being in the warmth of the sun can understand dreading the cold of the night. Strong images portrayed in this well crafted poem.

Comment Written by Brett Matthew West on 12-Feb-2021

Nine circles by Iza Deleanu

Excellent

Last line is an interesting concept. Held interest throughout. Nine circles well detailed. Noted to nits or errors while reading this well written story.

Comment Written by Brett Matthew West on 12-Feb-2021
Read and reviewed with blinders on.