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Red Leaves by lyenochka

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Meets the contest requirement of 2-4-2. Good play on the "frees/eese" sound. Strong internal rhyme. Good imagery. Well done.
Comment Written by Brett Matthew West on 13-Nov-2019

I see her... by royowen

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As the saying goes, even the families of soldiers serve when a member is in the military. Captures this situation spot on and shows the anguish suffered. Well done.
Comment Written by Brett Matthew West on 13-Nov-2019

The Ultimate Betrayal by Ulla

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That is one way to resolve this cheating problem. Good presentation, proper syllable count. The ambiguous ending makes you wonder which one of them took the bullet. Well done.
Comment Written by Brett Matthew West on 13-Nov-2019

My Gift To You As I Shoot Thru. by Sankey
Chapter 25 of the book Rants, Raves and Tributes

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Kind of sums everything up. Anybody who would pay real money to promote on this site must have a screw loose. I have written for other sites, and belong to three of them now. There is no way I would ever pay a penny of real cashola to promote on this, or any other site.
Comment Written by Brett Matthew West on 13-Nov-2019

Besieged by Ermine White by Mrs. KT

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If one suggestion could be offered it would be eliminate the white space between the first two lines of the nonet. Captures its theme spot on and paints a clear image.
Comment Written by Brett Matthew West on 11-Nov-2019

Happy Birthday by Sharon Haiste

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Seems he is "the one" and her life will be full of surprises. Word count spot on. Maybe she learned the lesson never look before you leap? Because if you do your conclusion may be incorrect.
Comment Written by Brett Matthew West on 10-Nov-2019

Scene at the Mailbox by Bill Schott

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"wearing a a suit" should be "wearing a suit". Did everything correct until the end. Isn't that the way things tend to wind up? Touch of humor thrown in for good measure. An enjoyable read.
Comment Written by Brett Matthew West on 02-Nov-2019

Road To Oblivion by easyeverett

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Good allusions and strong personification. Individual differences and the contemptuous nature of the two-legged species do not seem to matter to the MC. Well done.
Comment Written by Brett Matthew West on 02-Nov-2019

Rory by Sallyo
Chapter 3 of the book The Red Cat

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Definitely not a fairy tale for children. Draws the reader into the action. Good characterizations displayed. Leads well into them further developing their relationship. Many answered questions provided by "Rory".
Comment Written by Brett Matthew West on 02-Nov-2019

Autumn leaves... by royowen

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Good turn of phrase. Good illusion of how the "Warrior King" will return like "stirring autumn leaves". Was there a particular reason why the last stanza only contains two lines not four? A thoroughly enjoyable read.
Comment Written by Brett Matthew West on 02-Nov-2019


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