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AmaZing Animal - P by sandramitchell
Chapter 16 of the book AmaZing Animals

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Great work as always! I like the simplicity of the poem, and how you go more in depth with the facts section. I'm easily bored by long list of facts, but you always make it interesting and fun and it's super enjoyable to read. Well done,

-BT
Comment Written by BlueTiger on 16-Jul-2020

A Man Of Fiber by howard11

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Good work on this piece. You have a great descriptive writing style especially in the beginning of the story that makes the reader feel a part of the world.
Two edits:

Scott felt comfortable - Rather than just making that statement here, I would explain why he felt comfortable. Maybe say something about how the decor had a homey feeling or reminded him of good times in another place.

'she had what surfers called 'beached blonde hair' - I think you meant to say 'beach blonde' or 'bleached blonde'.

Overall great work, and best of luck on the contest!
-BT
Comment Written by BlueTiger on 23-May-2020

Smiles and Tears by Benny Beeharry
Chapter 25 of the book Book of Poetry

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Great work on this piece, Benny. I love the richness of your writing and the exuberance of it. You aren't afraid to touch on darker themes in a piece about praise. I like the phrase, 'some frenzied evil' - good word choice.

One error here:

Aghast humanity stand(s) still,

Again, great writing style. It reminds me of the song lyrics of Rich Mullins - you should check out 'Calling out Your Name' and 'The Color Green' by him. They have the same type of poetry I find in your work.
-BT
Comment Written by BlueTiger on 16-May-2020

Vettel possible to leave Ferrari by LittleIrishman

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Good work on this piece. I don't follow racing and know next to nothing about the sport, but I was able to follow along with your clear and concise writing style. The writing was brisk enough that the facts and figures didn't feel boring .
No grammar errors I could find. Nice work,
-BT
Comment Written by BlueTiger on 16-May-2020

Why Is It by ttec4u

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Great work on this piece. Your talent really comes through in this poem; well-formatted, with rhymes that click together nicely. Your emotions of longing and loneliness come through clearly, so the reader feels them with you. No grammar errors I could find.
-BT
Comment Written by BlueTiger on 16-May-2020

Swimming up in joy by Iza Deleanu

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Good work on this piece. I like the imagery you have in the line 'sun running through my hair'. Great job with making all the pieces of this poem work together and flow. No mistakes that I could find.
Have a great day,
-BT
Comment Written by BlueTiger on 16-May-2020

Quick Sand by ADB

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Great work on this piece. I love your concept of the 'quick sands of failure'. What a great metaphor for that feeling. Also the line 'catching twenty-two'. Wonderful last line about letting go and enjoying life despite failure.
No spelling or grammar errors I could find.
All the best,
-BT
Comment Written by BlueTiger on 16-May-2020

The Law of Attraction by Opal Rose

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Good work on this piece. I like your concept and I think it works well here. Good choice of artwork to go along with the poem. Great word choice there 'simultaneity'.
Have a great day,
-BT
Comment Written by BlueTiger on 16-May-2020

Judith's Place by emmaysavage

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Great work on this piece. This is a very peaceful, enjoyable poem to read. The rhymes work very well, and aren't clunky or awkward. No spelling or grammar errors that I could find.
Well done.
-BT
Comment Written by BlueTiger on 15-May-2020

Second Chances by AJ McCall

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Great job on this piece. You did really well with describing the scene and the character's feelings, so that the reader feels they are in the story as well. I like the description of the wind howling like an angry cat. Cool concept that you could definitely expand on if you wanted to.
One edit:
Being blow (blown) off a six-story building
Comment Written by BlueTiger on 15-May-2020


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