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Pam (respa)

Infinite Shiva by Gypsy Blue Rose

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-Lovely artwork and
presentation, Gypsy.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-You wrote a very good tanka.
-The syllable count is good.
-I like how you address Shiva,
and the pivot line is very good.
-The ending lines are also good
with a positive message of
freeing yourself of fear and
accepting love in your life.
-Very well done.
Comment Written by Pam (respa) on 02-Jun-2020

Lifetime of Love by Bucketlist

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-Nice image and
presentation,Trisha.
-Good to see you;
hope you are doing well.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-Effective imagery along
with the use of one continuous thought.
-A good message, too, about
how love brings happiness and
helps us through "life's challenges."
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written by Pam (respa) on 02-Jun-2020

The morning breezes by Sandra du Plessis
Chapter 342 of the book Little Good Morning Quotes

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-Nice image and
presentation, Sandra.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-Effective nature imagery
and use of alliteration.
-A good concluding line, too.
-Well done.
Comment Written by Pam (respa) on 02-Jun-2020

Vanquished by Cindy Decker

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-Very good image and
presentation, Cindy.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-I don't blame the aliens, either.
-Effective imagery describing
the coasters, and a very
good concluding line, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written by Pam (respa) on 02-Jun-2020

Your Favorite by Bill Schott

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-Nice artwork and
presentation, Bill.
-A good story to go with it.
-I like how each card had
the same signature.
-You have a way with making
things humorous with
30 somethings vying for their
mother's attention.
-Of course, I wonder if they
know they are written about?
-The conversation is very good.
-Thanks for sharing it, and
good luck in the contest.
Comment Written by Pam (respa) on 01-Jun-2020

Cloud Gazing

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-I always have to review
Charlie Brown and Snoopy poems.
-It is my favorite cartoon!
-The image is great along
with a nice presentation.
-This is a very well written poem, too.
-Good meter, rhyme and imagery.
-I have recently heard of "clotted cream."
-I also like the image of "cotton candy wheels..."
-A very good ending, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written by Pam (respa) on 01-Jun-2020
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Moving On -- 1895 by Pantygynt
Chapter 21 of the book The Maid of the Mill

Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

-I appreciate your notes about what is to come next.
-You did a good job with the ending of this section.
-I got a feeling of melancholy from "The hollow sound
made by the iron-tyred four wheeler" and
"with a heavy heart, she also recognised..."
-There is also a sense of resignation that
this is the situation, and we go from there.
-You mention Bridie and her role being
like what Hettie's new role will be.
-Sean has his eye on the next prize or
possibly prizes!
-I also like how you bring in
Jonet's philosophy as a reminder.
-The conclusion is excellent and makes
a very good point about how Hettie sees herself,
a miller with no reference to gender, and it makes
sense because that is the life she knows.
-She didn't have her mother for the
female guidance she needed.
-Perhaps the ending is the part
that is most bittersweet.
-You really did a great job with this.
Comment Written by Pam (respa) on 01-Jun-2020

An Insider Secret by thaities, Rebecca V.

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-The image goes well
with your dribble, Rebecca.
-You wrote it well, too.
-A good hook, followed by
many good examples of
what can work.
-Many sound scrumptious,
but the "brownie made in weighty 12-slotted
cast iron French Roll pans"
takes the cake:)
-It was a good one that leads
to your very good conclusion.
-Well done!
Comment Written by Pam (respa) on 01-Jun-2020

Julie by Katherine M. Kean
Chapter 10 of the book Iterated Initials for Soliloquists

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-Nice image and
presentation, Katherine.
-The story goes very
well with the picture
as June japes and jabbers!
-She definitely has a lot
to say and do, as well.
-I like the "jasmine-hued jalopy."
-A good ending, too.
-Well done.
Comment Written by Pam (respa) on 01-Jun-2020

Mama Said ... Age by Barb Hensongispsaca
Chapter 43 of the book 2020 - 3

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-Good artwork, Barb.
-Mama always has good advice.
-I like this poem that
makes some good points about age.
-It's funny how we see our
parents when we are young,
and then we are their age,
and suddenly understand.
-The concluding verse is
very good, and I agree:)
-Well done.
Comment Written by Pam (respa) on 01-Jun-2020


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