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Off The Wall I Am by Wetbelly01

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It seems Christianity has been targeted more so in recent years by those who would have everyone follow there faith. Seriously though, hasn't this gone on since long before anyone who lives today? Your poem gets to me in the sense that it reads like you are willing to fight for your right to believe in your faith. I admire that. A true believer isn't afraid to share. Thank you, enjoyed it very much.
Comment Written by dlw1925 on 12-May-2019

Noah's Ark Sightings by light

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A lot of good information here. It has a magazine article feel about it. Well structured with lots of supporting statements. Noah's arc has always held much interest for as well as many. Good topic.
Comment Written by dlw1925 on 12-May-2019

Things Cracking by Liz O'Neill
Chapter 3 of the book Be Wee With Bea Part2

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Long live the writer whose not afraid to share his or her imagination. If we allowed the judgement of others to control our imagination we'd never have stories like Harry Potter or Lord of the Rings. I like your story very much and hope to see much more.
Comment Written by dlw1925 on 11-May-2019

Aunt Cora' s Trip To The Ocean by Barb Hensongispsaca
Chapter 61 of the book 2019 part 2

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Cute story. Humorous and endearing. Flows well. There were times I had to remember to read it as a poem, however, because it would lose it's flow. Got lost in the story.
Comment Written by dlw1925 on 11-May-2019

Michael - The Conclusion by giraffmang

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WOW! Loved it. Exciting! I got a little confused at first when we switched to Michael watching the news and waiting for a plane. I think that was when I read what seemed like a present event where the bank robbery was taking place to the camera being ready only to realize it was a past event. Then another present time event where Louis is watching the end of a news report. Were you intending to imply Louis was remembering back at this point of the robbery earlier? I like the story but it seems like something is missing switching from one event to another.
Comment Written by dlw1925 on 23-Jun-2016

A Bill by TPAC
Chapter 34 of the book Act of Endurance

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Certainly there are many things both good and bad that people have done for a dollar bill. You have touched on many in this poem. I had a hard time understanding where you're meaning was going in this part.
"I need to have greater hopes than them,
a grand slam bill,
to have a few bills."
It seems there's a word or two I might suggest that might help the flow. Lady's arm, or would you kill?

Comment Written by dlw1925 on 06-Aug-2015

Shadow Walker by scongrove
Chapter 46 of the book SWEET CHAOS

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This is a very stimulating story. You a gift for vividly describing the passion between Jace and Tessa. Certainly anyone that has been in this position can identify with it. Other than the fact that she was raped by Sebastian I don't see much about who he was, what became of him or how he got to her. The same goes for Jem and Alexander. However this may be in another chapter that I've not read. This is a great reflection of writing talent. I look forward to reading more. Excellent job!
Comment Written by dlw1925 on 08-Apr-2015

Back With A Vengeance - Part Two by Margaret Snowdon
Chapter 86 of the book THE HEIRESS

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I can see why you've achieved so much as a writer. It's hard to deny true talent. Your writing reflects your thoughts and abilities. I couldn't see anything that needed improvement. I'm truly impressed and look forward reading more.
Comment Written by dlw1925 on 06-Apr-2015

Sunrise Interrupted by Finglas

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A beautiful picture. A smooth transition from land to water and to sky. Lots of natural color and the description fits the picture very well. It sets an atmosphere similar to the picture.
Comment Written by dlw1925 on 06-Apr-2015

You Light Up the Night by Writingfundimension
Chapter 6 of the book Stand Strong

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A very nice story in deed. Mara was very easy to connect with. The story held my interest all the way thru. However I'm not sure why you felt the need to repeat her mother's full name each time. Once I knew what it was it maybe go back to see if maybe I misunderstood something. The story flows well and I think if the rest goes as well as this it will be a very special and something to be proud of.
Comment Written by dlw1925 on 02-Apr-2015


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