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Chapter 13 Introducing Mr Henderson by jpduck
Chapter 13 of the book Time & Again -- A Novel

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Damn, Adrian, this gets better and better. Another excellent read. I was hoping this episode wouldn't end so I'd find out whether Mr. H. believed Nick. Will have to wait until next time. BTW, a small glitch. If you don't agree just ignore it. You said awoken suddenly. Should be 'awakened'. Just a quick comment.

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Jack
Comment Written by Scrivener on 20-Jul-2015

Chapter 9 -- Swimming by jpduck
Chapter 9 of the book Time & Again -- A Novel

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Another damned good read, Adrian. I love being along on this journey with Nick/Nicholas. Today, I could see and feel that ominous waterway. You have a great way with words. Congrats!

Jack
Comment Written by Scrivener on 29-Jun-2015

A Plan Gone Bad by ElPoetry001

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After 'police found' use of 'she' and 'he' incorrect pronouns Should be him and her.
After 'The example of parents' and in five other instances in this para, there is a caret and two question marks. This unusual anomaly also appears in some subsequent paras. I don't believe you intended this.

In addition to your unusual punctuation, you have only one spelling error I can see: syndrom is spelled syndrome, in Free Lunch Syndrome. Keep writing, Elpoetry1, but try not to become too political.
Comment Written by Scrivener on 14-Jun-2015

Settling In by jpduck
Chapter 8 of the book Time & Again -- A Novel

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Another excellent read, Adrian. Your superb writing is like a fine meal; I cannot wait until the next course. . .er, chapter. Keep 'em coming.

Jack
Comment Written by Scrivener on 14-Jun-2015

The Ghost's Locket-10 by emkoutny
Chapter 10 of the book The Ghost's Locket

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I thoroughly enjoyed your story, emkoutny. This chapter of The Ghost's Locket was truly absorbing. I have done middle grade stories myself, my favorite genre. This story was a great read. Keep up the great work.

Jack
Comment Written by Scrivener on 08-Jun-2015

Chapter 7 -- Denport Abbey School by jpduck
Chapter 7 of the book Time & Again -- A Novel

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Another terrific chapter, Adrian. Now you have me thoroughly hooked. It's becoming frustrating waiting for new chapters. As always, a great read. Keep up the excellent work.

Cheers!
Jack
Comment Written by Scrivener on 08-Jun-2015

Pauly Dipper (Act Two, Final Act) by Nan Beeson

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Exceedingly well done, Nan. A truly fascinating script of which I'd love to see a production. I'll be looking forward to Nan Beeson's scripts in the future.

Jack
Comment Written by Scrivener on 03-Jun-2015

Chapter 6 -- Nick's Legacy by jpduck
Chapter 6 of the book Time & Again -- A Novel

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Your tale becomes more and more fascinating, Adrian and well worth six stars. My own story "The Ring" is also about going back in time, but yours is unique and, as usual, a great read. Looking forward to more chapters.

Jack
Comment Written by Scrivener on 03-Jun-2015

crapMyDogSays-33-119-121 by mlittleton

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Wonderful essay on dogs and cats from their perspective. Very creative and humorous. You have the personalities of these pets down pat. You have to be a pet owner yourself. Just shows.

Jack
Comment Written by Scrivener on 25-May-2015

Chapter 4 -- Home Life by jpduck
Chapter 4 of the book Time & Again -- A Novel

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Another great chapter, Adrian. Your plot line gets curiouser and curiouser, to quote Lewis Carroll. I'm looking toward seeing your next chapter. Great read! BTW, how do you acquire so many reviews? I seem to receive only two per story/poem. I know you're going to keep up your great work.

Jack
Comment Written by Scrivener on 17-May-2015


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