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An Unexpected Event by Jacob Collins
Chapter 1 of the book Touched By Magic

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Well written, Jacob. Congratulations. I look forward to reading your additional chapters. I'm interested in knowing what's going on with Hartsbottle. Just one comment: Your character responds to his Dad,"I'll come to!" the incorrect use of 'to' I'm sure you realize it's a homonym, one of three: to, too, and two. I know it won't, but it could be construed as "I'll revive." My thoughts anyway.

Cheers!
Jack
Comment Written by Scrivener on 19-Apr-2015

Montage by Tatarka2

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What a superb story, Tatarka2. Heartfelt by someone who's 'been there'. I have been a journalist for some 55+ years and somewhat accustomed to writing about and empathizing about emotional and physical pain in others. I have also experienced personal pain. You have demonstrated your own empathy and care for your past clients. Congratulations. You truly deserve the six stars.

Jack
Comment Written by Scrivener on 19-Apr-2015

Water and Wine: Part One by Cat of Letters
Chapter 12 of the book Tails From My Life

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Hi Alison. I posted my review a few minutes ago but neglected to add the five stars your piece richly deserves. Now I've added them!

Cheers!
Jack
Comment Written by Scrivener on 05-Apr-2015

Time Goes By, Life Goes On by GWinterwin
Chapter 41 of the book Good and Bad in God's Country

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Good tale, Gwinterwin, and well-researched. I felt like I was right there in Jasper Creek, mingling with its residents. Couple comments: Unless the word 'town' is used as part of the town's title, the word shouldn't be capitalized, same for 'sheriff'. Period after "Good morning, men. I have. . . As well, there is some other punctuation in the piece that could use your attention. i.e., 1800s should not have an apostrophe. I've been a writer and journalist for close to 60 years. Just my thoughts. BTW, thank you for your service.
Comment Written by Scrivener on 03-Apr-2015

You Light Up the Night by Writingfundimension
Chapter 6 of the book Stand Strong

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Excellent story and bang-on for your YA age group. Now I find myself looking forward to your continuation. My congrats!
Comment Written by Scrivener on 02-Apr-2015


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