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Justice for Those Who Wait by Dorothy Farrell

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A most lovely poem, Dorothy. Beautiful flow from beginning to end, as we follow the story from a sad beginning to a just and pleasing conclusion. Love the closing couplet. Great job, and best of luck in the contest. Craig
Comment Written by CD Richards on 28-Feb-2021
Honeybee Bliss by Mrs. KT

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Nope, not on my watch. Every spring, as regular as clockwork, I wake up one morning to see just one of our paddocks has become a sea of yellow. It's such a pretty sight, I can't think why anyone would want to get rid of them. As for bees, they're quite dangerous to me (highly allergic), but I wouldn't be without them. We've already destroyed over a million species in our time here, if bees or butterflies join them, I think I'd rather check out.

Lovely poem, Diane. And I enjoyed the image and the video as well. Best of luck in the contest (if it's not too late).

Cheers,
Craig
Comment Written by CD Richards on 28-Feb-2021
A Walk Through Life by jaybird1

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Love the wisdom in this sonnet-like poem. You've created three classifications - things we should avoid, things we probably can't avoid, but aren't rushing to meet, and the things we should embrace. If only we were all wise enough to recognise them and act accordingly as we come across them. Great job, I enjoyed. Craig
Comment Written by CD Richards on 28-Feb-2021
Life is a Dream by Stephen Allen Crow

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I enjoyed this optimistic piece about life. At various points it had me starting to hum tunes by Bob Marley and Monty Python. I won't go into why, but it was fun. Enjoy the show, indeed. Well said. Best of luck in the contest. Craig
Comment Written by CD Richards on 28-Feb-2021
A Virtuoso Violinist by Pam (respa)

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Hi Pam,

A lovely poem and great tribute to a virtuoso performer.

I have a bit of a problem with line three. I think you need the adjective "renowned" at the end of the line, not the noun "renown". Also, if she's world-renowned, it probably follows that she's great. But then, this would throw out the end-rhyme with line one. Could I suggest something like:

to hear a player of such great renown.

Up to you, of course.

Good job, and I hope you've inspired many others to join in.

Cheers,
Craig
Comment Written by CD Richards on 28-Feb-2021
Invisible by rspoet

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I enjoyed this very much, RS. I think it's often true that it's the unspoken words and the spaces between speech that are the most telling. You extend the idea by suggesting even actions that are never enacted can have the most significance, which I suspect is also true. Great job, Craig
Comment Written by CD Richards on 28-Feb-2021
As Autumn Breezes Cease by easyeverett

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Your reference to pearlescent eyes reminds me of Ariel's song, from my favourite of Shakespeare's plays, The Tempest. In fact, the whole poem, with its theme of the transience of human life, reminds me of Prospero's humbling observation: "We are such stuff as dreams are made on, and our little life is rounded with a sleep."

Excellent stuff, Easy. I enjoyed very much. Craig
Comment Written by CD Richards on 28-Feb-2021
Evening Serenade by MissMerri

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I have no idea what the contest rules are (apart from the obvious one!), but I love this delightful short poem, Adonna. The end rhyme is a nice touch. Closing my eyes, I can feel the gentle cool breeze (it's blowing from the back and right of me) and hear the sweet music; even smell the garden. So I guess, for me, your poem works. Great job, and best of luck in the contest. Craig
Comment Written by CD Richards on 25-Feb-2021
Shoulder to Shoulder by Teri7

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What a lovely haiku, Teri. Good flow from line to line, and perfect form and subject matter. Great accompanying picture, which matches perfectly. Best of luck in the contest.

Craig
Comment Written by CD Richards on 25-Feb-2021
Living Within Us by Debbie Pope

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What a lovely tanka, Debbie. Only recently, I gave my granddaughter a beautifully presented edition of Alice in Wonderland and Through the Looking Glass. with the hope she'll love those stories as she grows up (for the next few years, her parents will have to read it to her). I bought another copy for myself, just because I've never actually read it. I'm thinking I will do just that on the occasions the last line in your poem comes true.

Terrific work, best of luck in the contest.

Craig
Comment Written by CD Richards on 25-Feb-2021
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