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Illusions by Minglement
Chapter 13 of the book Soul Whispers

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Crikeys you're a good writer. It's time to sell books with a good publisher. (Someone who won't rip you off.) Your work looks effortless, the words flow in conjunction, and descriptions of characters and what they are doing is detailed and excellent. Well done!
Comment Written by JanPerry on 19-Feb-2020

FanStory Mania by Mary Kay Bonfante

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It is certainly very nice to share ones thoughts here on the forum thanks to Tom and the others. A good declaration of your enjoyment with wisdom and poetic meter.
A nice flow too.
Comment Written by JanPerry on 13-Feb-2020

Guidance No.1 by Kim Conrad

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I think lust is our downfall. But attractions are always there. Love is fairly rare. Hate is common enough and trusting a stranger never does work.
Trust nowadays comes in documents of proof
Comment Written by JanPerry on 10-Feb-2020

Preparations by Minglement
Chapter 12 of the book Soul Whispers

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So the saga continues. It sounds like she may hurt her daughter again but it's good to give her a second chance. Maybe she will kidnap her daughter if something isn't done.
I guess we have to find out. Thanks for the story
Comment Written by JanPerry on 10-Feb-2020

Unprotected Trees by kahpot

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So many trees get felled. That's why we have computers but the printers make so many copies too.
Man plants so many new trees, therefore, we should be okay.
Comment Written by JanPerry on 09-Feb-2020

The Honey Festival by Luna Darkwaters

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It's fun and frivolous at the honey festival. It has a nice beat and is uplifting. I would like to go there except I hate to get stung by the bees.
I like the tempo.
Comment Written by JanPerry on 09-Feb-2020

You Were My Forever by Violet WolfChild

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Yes why should cancer be the end of a relationship? Surely u look after your partner happy in the knowledge they have you to lean on.
A good theme and nicely placed words together.
Comment Written by JanPerry on 09-Feb-2020

Dry Your Regrets by Luna Darkwaters

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This is poetic and nice, however, dry your regrets? Surely u could find better words. The regrets are wet? Try abolish or leave them behind.
Good ideas for a song. I think solve the past and resolve the past is better.
Comment Written by JanPerry on 09-Feb-2020

New Beginning by easyeverett

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The descriptions are delightful. "Sultry light", "blue moon comfort", a lovely set of descriptions portraying your mood.
Reputation is often overrated in poems. I've noticed a lot of others doing it too.
New beginnings are for you a way to acquire new knowledge. Well said.
Comment Written by JanPerry on 07-Feb-2020

Words by Minglement

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Words hurt us just as much as physical pain. Why do we worry so much about what others think of us ? Why aren't we secure enuf in ourselves to just ignore those words. But maybe they have truth to them after all.!
Comment Written by JanPerry on 03-Feb-2020


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