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Love's Arrhythmia by RShipp

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Rshipp's haikuesque goes straight to the heart of the matter ... if I may borrow a famous title by Graham Greene. Unlike his heart, this poet's meter and cadence miss not a single beat in seventeen syllables. Five thrums on the old heart-strings for this "cordial" piece.


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Comment Written by AvL on 03-Jan-2020

The Diviners by Gloria ....

Exceptional
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Gloria certainly knows how to wow us with impactful images and wondrous wordplay. "gnarled knots of steel-wool gray" appeals as much to the visual as to the auditory imagination. In this poem, images and words percolate like tea or coffee -- "brooding mist brewed darker black ..." -- and the double -- or is it triple? -- meaning of "brooded" is well-noted, like the multiple interpretations of "Diviners." Do divinely- inspired birds divine -- locate -- water? Apparently. Finally, as concrete poetry, this nonet is infundibular, i.e., funnel-shaped, like a darkly- brewed, brooding tornado. This opus is masterful, on multiple levels.


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Comment Written by AvL on 29-Dec-2019

One Smiling Word by Jesse James Doty

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J. J. D. explores the conundrum of synaesthesia in the above poem, whose novel rhyme-scheme is abc X 4 d. The question/theme of this work is that delicate balance between the desire for individuality, and the need to remain connected to others. Well-done.
Comment Written by AvL on 29-Dec-2019

A Memoir by Sandra Ludwick

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S. L. is an above-average memoiriste who is not grammatically- and/or syntactically-challenged: rare qualities among contributors to FS. In para. nine, she should revise the redundant combination "coincidentally, coincided ..." Otherwise, well-done.


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Comment Written by AvL on 28-Dec-2019

Finches by Y. M. Roger

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Ahhh, more poetry for birdbrains ... I approve! Line two is chirpfully charming, and alluringly alliterative. Five finch-feathers.


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Comment Written by AvL on 28-Dec-2019
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Holiday Cheer by Joan E.

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Appropriately enough, this exercise in pentasyllabic poetry has earned five stars; it is quintessentially quaint. Kudos.


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Comment Written by AvL on 28-Dec-2019

Swirling Colors by Pam (respa)

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Pam(respa,) through her online avatar Polly Chromatick, analogizes cosmogony as an exercise in divine painting. So, God said, "Let there be Red, and Orange, and ..." et caetera, right? I see her vision ...


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Comment Written by AvL on 28-Dec-2019

A Game of Chance by RShipp

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In this "pip" of a poem, we see the difference between aleatory verse and stochastic poetry. The die -- rather, dice -- are cast: 3 + 2 stars.


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Comment Written by AvL on 28-Dec-2019

Challenging Science by Therese Caron

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The above haikuesque poem concerns itself with the age-old conundrum of the numinous world versus the phenomenological realm. Of course, he or she must realize that the concluding line is self- contradictory: If the poet sees whatever is presumably invisible to others, that Unseen" is, indeed, seen. See? Five invisible stars.


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Comment Written by AvL on 28-Dec-2019
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

A Politician's Lament by jaybird1

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The question is, of what, and/or of whom, is the above a satire/parody? A satire/lampoon/parody must be recognizable as a playful, or even sardonic, reference to a pre-existent work and/or author. Such is not the case here. I would classify this poem as a polemic.


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Comment Written by AvL on 28-Dec-2019


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