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Autumn Evening by Alan K Pease

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This is a beautiful poem. I especially like the image of the different birds sleeping as the sun goes down. Great job.
Comment Written by Chunger on 25-Aug-2015

Therapy by Spitfire
Chapter 51 of the book When Blood Collides

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I want to first start by admitting that being fairly new to FS I have not read the previous posts to this writing. My main question after having read this is that if the main character works in the high school she would know that anytime she takes a leave she is liable to loose any and all of her classes for the need of consistency. Unless of course she leaves for a short amount of time in the middle of the year. Like I said, I am not sure of the details of her leaving, but I wanted to make sure your character is as believable as possible. Forgive me if I am rambling for no reason.
Comment Written by Chunger on 23-Aug-2015

Mt. Morris,WI in the warm months #1 by justfos

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This is a beautiful story with many great visuals: "deer seem to have sent their babes out on their own", "Doe loudly snorted and stomped " (do not capitalize doe)... Great job
Comment Written by Chunger on 23-Aug-2015

Written By The Stars by XGoneX
Chapter 2 of the book Written by the Stars - Poems

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This is a great peace to end the novel with and leaves the reader wanting more. If you don't mind me asking, do you have your works "novel ready" before posting them on here? I am in the midst of writing a novel but am afraid to post anything unless it is perfect. But then how will I get feedback? Any advice would be wonderful!
Comment Written by Chunger on 23-Aug-2015

Poetry and Poison: Chapter 2 by Sis Cat
Chapter 2 of the book Poetry and Poison

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Great start to this section! It got my attention right away. I admit I have not read any previous postings for this story and without knowing anything about it I was hooked. Great job, I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written by Chunger on 23-Aug-2015

My Friend In Heaven by Writeronboard

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I am sorry that you have lost your friend. I am glad that you have faith and plans to meet again. Beautiful poem. My only suggestion is that in the last line you have two "will"s and I am not sure if that is a typo or not.
Comment Written by Chunger on 23-Aug-2015

She Did Her Best by Leineco

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This is a fun poem. Before reading your notes, my original through was that I bet many new wives can relate to this "trying to emulate". After reading your notes it makes sense and is sad. Good job.
Comment Written by Chunger on 23-Aug-2015
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

haiku (snow encrusted limb) by rspoet

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This is a beautiful poem. The image of blue moonlight on a snow white branch is very clear. Great job on this poem. I wish you luck in the contest.
Comment Written by Chunger on 23-Aug-2015

Window #3 by pickmeplease

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Interesting story. Entertaining poem. I might suggest distinguishing between speakers with either the use of font change or format of the poem. It is just a suggestion though. Good job.
Comment Written by Chunger on 23-Aug-2015
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Pony Ride by w.j.debi

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Cute poem. I feel like the speaker is a child who wants nothing more than to go for this ride and is almost arguing with an adult figure who should "know better" than to ask the obvious. Good job.
Comment Written by Chunger on 23-Aug-2015


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