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Falling All to Pieces by shaffer40

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Creepy and evocative. This is a tough format, but your spare, judicious use of language lends itself to the success of this piece. Nicely done, and best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written by pit viper on 22-Apr-2019

Ah ... Meal Time by Lu Saluna

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My little sister Holly also has cerebral palsy. I can totally, TOTALLY relate. Lolz. Even now (we are middle aged; I am a Pre-K teacher, she is a university professor) family meals suck. She has trouble swallowing. She chokes on food, gags, vomits into her plate. But this is as it has always been. this is our *normal*. And it's okay. Families are complicated sometimes. Loved this piece. - Pit Viper
Comment Written by pit viper on 17-Jun-2017

Amen by ronnie k

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A great reminder to enjoy what is positive in our lives. In these times, it is so much easier to focus on the negative, but the truth is, God is good. - PV
Comment Written by pit viper on 11-Jun-2017

Mama 2 by ronnie k

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I don't know what to say. This is lovely; heart-felt and beautiful. I see no corrections that need to be made. Best wishes.
Comment Written by pit viper on 19-Feb-2017

Lina Medina-Childwoman by Meia (MESAYERS)

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Oh my. What a tragic event. It brings tears to my eyes, to think what the poor child went through. Your lovely, poetic words did it justice. Kudos for choosing such a difficult and disturbing subject.
Comment Written by pit viper on 18-Feb-2017

The Triangle by F. Wehr3

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Excellent story! I think it should've won first in the contest. I entered as well, and didn't even place. I am beginning to find these contests a little suspect. Anyway, yeah... this really brings back the whole flavor of being in 3rd grade. There was always "that one kid". In my 3rd grade experience, his name was "Sonny", and he later went to prison for robbing a porno store while on crack and killing a clerk and two customers. :( I like stories that place the reader right in the action, and allow you to connect the story with your own life. Yours did that, like no other contest entry that I read. Bravo.
Comment Written by pit viper on 14-Feb-2017

Endless Love by Dorothy Farrell

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A spare and lovely piece; great imagery and turns of phrase. Truly moving, reminds me of the power of love to overcome all obstacles. Great work!
Comment Written by pit viper on 29-Jan-2017

One Fine Day by Luna
Chapter 3 of the book The Muse's Match-Up!

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I love your spare, concise style of writing. And your descriptive phrases ("Many fairies with their beautiful gossamer wings were with me...") are second to none.
Lovely.
Comment Written by pit viper on 29-Jan-2017

Deception by Margaret Snowdon
Chapter 15 of the book THE SCENTED SHAWL

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Loved it! Can't wait to read more. This is the sort of writing I love: tons of description, paint a picture with words so I can really SEE it.
No real criticism; a few spelling errors. "Waggon"= wagon.
Truly great writing.
Comment Written by pit viper on 29-Jan-2017

Another Hospital Visit by Cedar
Chapter 2 of the book Stories Told in a Poem

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A tender and playful piece that illustrates the importance of relationships. Very consice and well-written. Loved it! :)
Comment Written by pit viper on 29-Jan-2017


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