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Red Rose by MJLattin

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This haiku gives clear image of rose with thorns and a vase. To that extent it is pretty good which is a requirement of a haiku. What it is not meeting is there should be minimal punctuation marks for any haiku whether the rule for this particular contest says or not...so you can remove all full stops. Capital letters should be avoided. Also I'm not seeing satori. Perhaps you can rework in these areas

Wish you all the best
Comment Written by Sambangi on 29-Jul-2016
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Rise, Love by KatrinaWinters

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I'm not very sure about the rules of this contest. It says it doesn't require rhyme, meter and syllable count. Then why to call it minute poem? ... lol
But of course you have followed the rules of minute poem. Meter/flow probably needs some improvement, but you stuck to other rules very well
All the best
Comment Written by Sambangi on 20-Jun-2016
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Sagebrush by GoodHearted Woman

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You have chosen a beautiful topic for this format. I too have noticed there is some typo. This is a minute poem, not minuet....lol. I liked the rhymes and flow in your poem except first line of second stanza. To be honest, I feel this line needs some improvement.

Wish you all the best
Comment Written by Sambangi on 20-Jun-2016
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spirit of nature by Galactia

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Excellent description of lightning followed by rain. Great imagery. I liked the last stanza very much. Earth surface is a life'so vast stage.stage. Good thinking
Wish you all the best
Comment Written by Sambangi on 18-Jun-2016
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Summer Thoughts by RYME4U

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This is a pretty cool poem on hot summer with things like ice creams, bermuda shorts, tennis courts etc., Very good rhyme is maintained though it is not compulsory as per rules. Wish you all the best
Comment Written by Sambangi on 16-Jun-2016
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Flutter of Wings by Belinda

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Small and simple things often bring lot of joy like your poem did. The poem is made so simple yet very touching. In the absence of meter, rhymes and all that rules...content and intent of the poet makes it a joyful read
Comment Written by Sambangi on 15-Jun-2016

Act of Becoming by LoannaLois

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This is really beautiful. Life is so short for anyone for that matter and we need to look at positive ways. Your words look so tender and gentle like the petal. Very well done
Comment Written by Sambangi on 15-Jun-2016

The Doves Wept by sweetwoodjax

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It's a beautiful expression of love you have towards him. Especially I liked these couple of lines
Doves mate for life and mourn their
mate so I feel a kinship with them now

very earnest
Comment Written by Sambangi on 15-Jun-2016

The Poet's Words by Pam (respa)

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This is an excellent whitney poem. I read somewhere poet sees where even Sun fails to see, that could be inside the heart and mind.
Just one word I feel a disconnect here. Please see the fifth line. Any typo here? "there" or "they". I think "they" makes sense
Comment Written by Sambangi on 15-Jun-2016

paper cut by abra19

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Excellent write. Especially I liked the word selection you have used to describe the harsh tongue. Let them fly razor sharp and slash...barrage of blades...simply beautiful
Comment Written by Sambangi on 15-Jun-2016


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