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Old Culler Lake by Mimi Linny

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I so loved your story/poem Old Culler Lake. As I started reading I quickly recognized that the anapestic tetrameter (wow that is a mouthful and sounds like medicine) of "The Night Before Christmas" was used. Curious, I began a little research. I read that this meter is used in Dr. Seuss as well as Robert Browning's work "How They Brought the Good News from Ghent to Aix" (I haven't read that one)

There is something about this type of rhyming that makes one want to smile and skip along. Though your story is tragic is so much fun and memorable. Great work. Hummingbirdhill
Comment Written by hummingbirdhill on 28-Nov-2017

Katauta (in night's deep silence) by Lena Borghi

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Congratulations on your beautiful words to a lover. the picture is a lovely addition that fits the story well. hummingbirdhill.
Comment Written by hummingbirdhill on 14-Oct-2017

Off with her head! by Meia (MESAYERS)

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Hello Meia,
Your "overlong poem", as you call it, is wonderful. I have been fascinated with the story of Anne Boleyn for years, both as the tragic mother of Queen Elizabeth, and the historical impact her short life delivered as she became entwined with the indomitable Henry VIII.

"I have observed a shifting change, of late.
A shifty look is in your eyes, of greyest slate." This says worlds about what poor Anne felt and observed. Heartbreaking, it must have been.

Sadly Anne was never allowed to cherish and watch her daughter grow and become one of the most powerful confident women in history. I see Anne as a tragic example of the male ego given unlimited power.

Your style of telling Anne's story poetically goes all the way back to Beowulf. Once reading that epic poem-story, possibly as old as 700AD I came to accept the poetic style of telling a story. Beowulf's powerful music began to resonate in my brain. You have obviously heard the same patterns of thinking. You have provided a breathtaking sample of what our English Language is capable of in storytelling. Congratulations! Hummingbirdhill
Comment Written by hummingbirdhill on 11-Oct-2017

Rejuvenation by frogbook

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What an adorable story! It kept me interested and on my toes as I wasn't expecting the Halloween Party. The moral to the story, one more about new neighbors, and the trials they must endure to "fit In" was true to form.

Stella Mae Burton and Harold found a unique opportunity to put a little spice in their marriage and relax her fears about the inevitable change a new, younger neighbor brings to their lives. Good work. Hummingbirdhill
Comment Written by hummingbirdhill on 05-Oct-2017

When Dawn Breaks by pipersfancy

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Hello, Pipersfancy, I so enjoyed this rhyming inspirational poem. I really loved, "The sun casts light, dispelling night" and "Every hoof and wing knows to bray and sing" Your love of nature is clearly exposed. Sincerely, Hummingbirdhill
Comment Written by hummingbirdhill on 04-Oct-2017

Mystery of Love by Pam (respa)

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Hello Pam (respa)

This sonnet has been wonderfully crafted with the constraining format. Your touching sonnet rings true. I can feel the sadness that lives in your soul (the person in the poem). This is of course is what makes it real.

I wonder how many lovers have stood on that exquisite old bridge with memories both sad and happy. Great pairing of the picture with the sonnet. The bridge could be as old as Shakespearean times, and maybe the designer intended it to be.

Great line. "With feelings new, our cares had not begun:"

I can't help but ponder, does all passionate love begin this way? Hummingbirdhill
Comment Written by hummingbirdhill on 12-Sep-2017

Steak, Please! by FxstsLisa

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Precise and relevant 1-6-1 syllable poem. Excellent. Ha, Ha! I love the green tongue. The perfect picture for this poem. I'm with you on the choice; still I urge myself to buy the kale and other greens regularly. Hummingbirdhill
Comment Written by hummingbirdhill on 12-Sep-2017
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by a tree by trimple

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Congratulations on winning First Place in this contest. Your perspective is unique and unexpected. I love the picture also. Sincerely, Hummingbirdhill
Comment Written by hummingbirdhill on 25-Aug-2017

~Hopeful~ by write hand blue

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Congratulations on winning the First Prize in the contest.

I could visualize the angst of the restraints of 15 years, the angry marking "fifteen large notches".

I was not expecting the ending. I burst out laughing. It is Irony at it's darkest! Chilling! Good job! Hummingbirdhill
Comment Written by hummingbirdhill on 21-Aug-2017

Ideas! by Analie Shepherd

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Hello Analie,
Your delightful rhyming poem gave me a hearty laugh at the end! The poem has perfect timing and rhythm. I believe I will post the poem on my wall and read it when I need a good chuckle.

Your first thoughts on ideas are so true and so well described.

The entire poem is so much fun. It's just like skipping down a delightful path strewing flower petals for someone to follow as you sing a little rhyme.

The ending is hilarious! So please, no target practice on your next idea.
With chuckles, Hummingbirdhill
Comment Written by hummingbirdhill on 14-Aug-2017


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