Nurse Felicity Dillyard
by Jacqueline M Franklin
Chapter 20 of the book I Promise You--Someday and Forever
Lots happening in a transition chapter. A whore decides to turn her life around. A gang decides to split town. A husband realizes the depth of his love for his two wives. And there's some screeching sounds. Oh, and some sex stuff, too.
You have a mess o' tenses in this fragment:
she whispered, while taking his hardness into her body and began a slow ride.
she whispered, while she took his hardness into her body and began a slow ride.
she whispered, taking his hardness into her body and beginning a slow ride.
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