The Rustle In The wind- Twenty
Chapter 20 of the book The Rustle In The Wind
This was an enjoyable read. You convey the excitement and exhaustion of your first flight very convincingly.
I saw a few minor issues for you to consider.
"So how do you feel so far, Ulla," the purser said turning towards me with a smile. -- Since this is a question, I think you need to end the dialogue with a question mark.
Food was preheated while taxing, -- should be taxiing. Looks odd, but correct.
Anna, to my delight, made sure to stand beside me, and the next thing I knew, she poked a finger into my ribs. -- I'm not sure about this sentence. Commas are my downfall but I think you have too many here. I believe only those around "to my delight" should be kept, but use your best judgement.
What happens next?
Comment Written by dweigt on 21-May-2018