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Blast From the Past by kiwisteveh

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A fun story about the evolution of the whale, his thoughts and opinions and I enjoyed this fun write.

This is my favourite verse:

Then with these last thoughts troubled
He sank until there bubbled
From th' abysmal depths a tremor long and loud.
As this monster pachydermal
Joined the ranks of the eternal,
Took the coral for a coffin and the seaweed for a shroud.

Much enjoyed Steve,

Love Dolly x
Comment Written by Dolly'sPoems on 27-Nov-2021

I Am Ironman by Gloria ....

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These athletes are strong and have immense energy and describing them as iron men is so appropriate. I am not familiar with this form buy you managed to champion it with your well chosen words Gloria. Fabulous internal rhyming here which gave this write a magical touch, a well earned six, love Dolly x
Comment Written by Dolly'sPoems on 27-Nov-2021

Achievable by Tommie Montford1

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We sometimes fall into the trap of routine and forget to notice the one we fell in love with and now live with. This causes people to get divorced. To keep the love alive take a lot of effort.

Suggestions for these lines:

(Let's) be honest you are tired of trying to love someone you don't.
It's just someone (you're) use to.

Love Dolly x
Comment Written by Dolly'sPoems on 27-Nov-2021

The Right Thing To Do by Taminang Therese N

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This is a sad tale of death, grief and forgiveness. Thankfully we don't have snakes in this country and they can indeed be dangerous, a well rhymed write, love Dolly x
Comment Written by Dolly'sPoems on 27-Nov-2021

A Rigged System by Jean B Almonord

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The system tends to favour those with social position and money, but the truth prevails in life and knowing it will stand you in good stead. Wealth is in integrity and honesty and money cannot buy that. If you own these powers within your personality, you will also gain worldly wealth and position, a powerful write about poverty once again being used against an individuals rights in life, love Dolly x
Comment Written by Dolly'sPoems on 27-Nov-2021

Better Together by LaChelle King

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We are what we eat they say and education in nutrition would help to persuade those who eat poorly that it is just as cheap to eat healthily, it just takes effort. We need to help each other to understand the fundamentals. A poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written by Dolly'sPoems on 27-Nov-2021

A Vision by Jean B Almonord

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This sounds like a wonderful vision of how we could see the world and how we will see the world again after this period of gloom we have encountered, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written by Dolly'sPoems on 27-Nov-2021

Wind, Sun, and Birds

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An uplifting write about nature at its best and an appreciation of our skies and the joy of being alive. Each day has so much to offer, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written by Dolly'sPoems on 27-Nov-2021
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Poetry by Barry Penfold

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You captured some great memories in your fine poem here Barry. Just a suggestion for these two lines to keep them in meter:

Take a trip down (mem'ry) lane,
Search corners of your mind

You started off with a great rhythm and you lost the flow a little later in your poem, but I still loved the sentiments and rhymes.

Love Dolly x
Comment Written by Dolly'sPoems on 27-Nov-2021

Winter's Lacy Draped Splendor by Mrs. KT

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Very descriptive Diane and those crystals shine through with lacy tapestry here, your words are so appropriate for these scenes which I witnessed in Le Carroz, France, one winter, long ago, magical, love Dolly x
Comment Written by Dolly'sPoems on 27-Nov-2021


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