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Tier V. King

Older by RGstar

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Good monring, RG: I finally found a little time to review this poem. My lap top is acting up so I will return to it in about an hour.

As for this poem. I love the way you present the questions that really answer themselves or are used as proof or in comparison to what gets older or what it is like. ( especially the first stanza)

Is a rose less a rose if mature be--
or the lawn less green, after rain has been?
She is said, abalone orange-- the cherry in red.
So why imbue, or stray, to colours grey?
Yes, youth may fade...like the ending of a song,
but, is a kiss, too, lost; its purpose gone?
...as if would say;
to yesterday belong.
-------<@ (what a beginning and the strength continues on throughout this poem till the end - It ends with the one word that titles it - "older."

What a brilliant and powerful way to end a poem. I really enjoyed it all.

I did learn so much from you in the short time that we were in communication. I especially learned to take my time with my poetry, never rush it. When each poem is perfect I will know it by my total satisfaction with it. I thank you so much for this and I will reach out to you as time goes on. I love your updated profile and photo, very impressive.


Comment Written by Tier V. King on 04-Feb-2018

Red sock by YNWA

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Good morning, Mitchell: I believe I shall miss your poetry so much. It is for poetry like yours that I was so tempted to stay. I will PM you my e-mail so that when you do publish your book you can let me know so that I can buy it my for poetry collection.

This poem is your normal brilliant way of writing in the way only you can. It amazes me that with no rhyming at all your free verse is still the most poetic poetry I have ever read. You have a gift of putting words together so well that each time my mind goes to the places and situations described. It is astounding!
Comment Written by Tier V. King on 29-Jan-2018

Historical Art Twins by Joy Graham

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Good morning, Joy: I see that you have taught us another poetry form. Thank you for this lesson also. Your poem is terrific so you really pulled it off. Computers are so interesting and the programs that exist boggles the mind. I think it's cute that Breanne has time to play with the computer. CUTE!
Comment Written by Tier V. King on 28-Jan-2018

Underground Life by Maria Jose Garcia

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Good morning, Maria: You did well on this one. It is easy to imagine that your character is in a situation or a place they cannot get out of. Your words are well chosen and well-written. I think it's great that you used the video that actually inspired this Two Sentence Horror story. I mean, what could be more horrible than being buried alive. It equals to anything of horror I could ever think of. (Yikes)
Comment Written by Tier V. King on 28-Jan-2018

McPherson by Thomas Bowling
Chapter 14 of the book The West

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Good morning, Thomas: You did put the warning at the top of the page but I decided to read it anyway and I wasn't disappointed. It is a very well-written chapter. It is sad that Springs ended up taking his own life but it seemed kind of obvious he would. It still somehow shocked me that this really brave, fierce and strong man could be so broken. You have described a war that most of us would die just to think of it. The whole group of soldiers were all covered in Indian blood from head to toe, drenched in it. (Yuck!) What a horrible battle! The is excellence at it's best.
Comment Written by Tier V. King on 28-Jan-2018

A Bible Story by Dolly'sPoems

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Good morning, Dolly: Yes, this is one of my favorite Bible stories also. It was an example of the wisdom he received from Goa after he asked for it from Him. After all, what real mother of a child would want her baby to be cut in half. What a wise test by King Solomon. You poem is great, Dolly.
Comment Written by Tier V. King on 28-Jan-2018

Who put Bella in the Wytch Elm? by Meia (MESAYERS)

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Good morning, Meia: This poem and story is very, very interesting. It keep me reading eagerly right down to the end. This person who did this thing to Bella is a sick person and continues to taunt the Police about it. Although by now, if someone is still leaving that message, it may be someone else related to the original murderer. I hate it that he took advantage of the time period, murdering her during the war. Of course everyone would lose interest. The war was a distraction.

Anyway, good job again on this poem and story. I'm not feeling well today. I am sure that I have the flu but I am still at work. I will reach out later...
Comment Written by Tier V. King on 28-Jan-2018

Renoir Impressions by estory
Chapter 9 of the book Word Games

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An abstraction of experience, an emotion rather than action. estory

Good morning again, estory: I understand what you are saying above but to me this poem feels so active. It is like a warm set up for the ballet about to happen. The words dance so lovely on the page and when I read it I imagined some classical music playing softly in the background. Lovely.

I did see your other post - the out of this world story - I got half way through reading it and then things got real at work. I will have to read it later because I am sick with flu symptoms right now. I reach out tomorrow.
Comment Written by Tier V. King on 28-Jan-2018

Colors by estory
Chapter 18 of the book Word Games

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Good morning, estory: This colors poem is so sweet an full of color in a way that paints my heart with a satisfaction. I particularly enjoyed the start of the poem and where you summed it up by the sixth line with " alive with roses planted by mother. It makes it all sound so sentimental. Thoughts of mother is perfection.

Pearl white clouds in an azure sky
Drifting over the emerald sea
Beyond the purple mountain majesty
Of sage, crimson, goldenrod
Across the lavender fields
Alive with roses planted by mother
Comment Written by Tier V. King on 28-Jan-2018

In the darkness... by royowen

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Good morning, Roy: I don't mind the dark ones, In fact this poem is a heads up for us or a somewhat of a reminder for those who know how important this really is. It is such an eloquent and well-written poem also. I do love your poetry, Roy. I am happy to see you at # 2 so far.
Comment Written by Tier V. King on 27-Jan-2018


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