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At the Proper Time by Spangle

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Hi Janet. This is undoubtedly a very profound statement in view of our times. I have to be onest with your dear friend. Then red text is washed out in the black background.

I thought it might just be my eyes but checked with a couple of friends and they agree. You may want to make some sort of change. Perhaps a red background with black text would work.

Bless you, I like ths 5-7-5

: ) Bob
Comment Written by Mastery on 09-Jul-2020

Mountain Quest by oNray

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Hi Bob. The words in your poem are not that far from the truth, my friend. Global warming is eating away more each and every day and yet the world is sitting still, it seems.

Wonderfully written and I liked these lines especially well:
"Each day the oceans search the shores
An endless task as it explores..."

Bless you, my friend. : ) Bob
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Comment Written by Mastery on 08-Jul-2020

The GPS by Mark Valentine

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Hey Buddy. Where ya been? LOL I have sure missed you and your great sense of humor. This piece is another fine example of your talent. Dialogue only is not tha easy to pull off.


I loved this: "Whoa! There is some seriously dystopic Orwellian shit happening up in here. Look, Mark Zuckerberg, or Steve Jobs, or whoever you are, you're taking this invasion of privacy thing way too far."

Good stuff, as always, my friend. : ) Bob
"Go Cubs!!! What? Damn!
Comment Written by Mastery on 08-Jul-2020

Slide, Buddy! Slide!

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Good job, author. I am not sure of how a tyburn is written, but it seems like the emphasis may be on alliteration and rhyme. Is that correct? I love baseball and miss it. Your poem hits a homerun with me. : ) Bob
Comment Written by Mastery on 08-Jul-2020
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OCD not quite a poem by djsaxon

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Atta way to go, my friend. LOL Can you believe how this is all going to hell.Like the gag says: "Where am I going..and why am I in this handbasket?"

You did a good job nailing down the ones who buy into it and everything else, too.

Bravo, my friend. Sorry I have missed so much, I just got back on. Take care. : ) Bob
Comment Written by Mastery on 08-Jul-2020

Crushed in a FLASH by Elizabeth Emerald

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Hi Liz. LOL "A day over eighty? I don't think that would work, my friend. I don't know which contest this is for but it sure seems clever enough to be in contention. Good luck with it. : ) Bob
Comment Written by Mastery on 08-Jul-2020

How to Survive a Social Outing by Margaret Bednar

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A bit quirky, yes, but well written and interesting too. I especially liked this part, Margaret:

"swig swiftly the whiskey.
and don't let your eyebrows
give you away."

So, is that how it is done? LOL

:) Bob
Comment Written by Mastery on 08-Jul-2020

Beach Walking by DeboraDyess

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Hi Deb. I agree with your notes, it is always good to relive great memories from the past with our mates.

This is a wonderful poem. I especially like this part:
"Cool Gulf waves splashing their hot feet.
Together, hand-in-hand,
Lovingly.....

(Just a tip, whenever possible don't use adverbs (Words ending with "ly.") Perhaps here, just "in love" would work just as well, if not better, my friend.

: ) Bob
Comment Written by Mastery on 08-Jul-2020

The Secret

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I love it! And whatsmore I believe it! LOL Good little 20 syllables for any contest, author. One wishes they could hear the rest or at least some more of the successful journey. Bless you and take care.Good luck in the contest. I think ts a winner. : ) Bob
Comment Written by Mastery on 07-Jul-2020
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Chicago, Chicago by aryr
Chapter 19 of the book My Life

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Hi, allie. Whew! my dear friend, Iam worn ot both physically and mentally after living through this read. LOL Poor Jim. I'll bet he was fit to be tie dwhen he blew that turbo. They are not cheap. That much I remember from my days in the trucking biz, back in the eighties.

And poor you. How in the world did you occupy yourself for all that down time?

I am looking forward to your next adventure, dear friend so you can fill me in. : ) Bob
Comment Written by Mastery on 07-Jul-2020


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