The Swamp
by mbroyles2
Chapter 1 of the book The Hardening
I like where your going. You've got a good preface, I really wouldn't call this a chapter, but I would an idea of why he would try to dump the body for the gators rather than in this "pit" earlier than after he'd already left. What i really like though was that little backstory part about trying gator hunting once. Character devolpment is often over looked.
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Comment Written by Bergbomb on 26-Mar-2018
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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
Thanks.
In the future when you give three stars it would be helpful if you gave suggestions on what you didn't like and how I can improve. I do appreciate you taking the time to review.
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reply by Bergbomb on 03-Apr-2018
I only gave it three stars because it was only the beginning. I'd like to read more and see how you build off of this foundation before I give a higher rating. Good luck though, you've got a good start.
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