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Rude Interruption by c_lucas

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So are tumbleweed and Jerry the same person? Also I would change "shooter fired" to "had fired"
Other than that I love it, I can't wait to read the rest
Comment Written by Bergbomb on 20-Apr-2018

The Swamp by mbroyles2
Chapter 1 of the book The Hardening

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I like where your going. You've got a good preface, I really wouldn't call this a chapter, but I would an idea of why he would try to dump the body for the gators rather than in this "pit" earlier than after he'd already left. What i really like though was that little backstory part about trying gator hunting once. Character devolpment is often over looked.
Comment Written by Bergbomb on 26-Mar-2018


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