My Comments

If Only by DeanAlanChantler
Chapter 4 of the book Meanderings in a Mindfield.

Excellent

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Love the rhyme pattern of this. It really flows. Usually I get caught up by a few jarring words while reading poetry, but nothing stuck out in your poem. Really like the first stanza. Good luck in the contest.

Comment Written by R.E. A. on 03-Aug-2011

Patience by denhagan

Good

Enjoyed the rhyme scheme. Though I tripped over the fourth line for some reason. To me it just seems too wordy. I know that it becomes complicated when working with a set number of sylables, but I wonder if there's a more consise way to get across your meaning?

Love the beginning of the second stanza, patience truely is needed when attemptig poetry.

Just my opinion, but the fourth line of the second stanza seems vague to me I read your author note, but I wonder if there isn't a more descriptive way to show this.

Overall a good poem.

Comment Written by R.E. A. on 03-Aug-2011

Wise Whys - From A 3-Year-Old Guy by Robert D Wilson

Excellent

Great job with this! I loved your alliterations. A very creative acrostic.

"Necessary Nebulosities Numerated
Shouting, "Secret Solutions Supply!"

I really like those two lines. Great job with this! :)

Comment Written by R.E. A. on 25-Aug-2010

My Last Night by katz meow

Excellent

Your first stanza drew me into the poem. I can easily visualize the scene.

It's a poem of loss, but also of letting go. I thought you presented the idea well in thie poem. Good luck with the contest.

Comment Written by R.E. A. on 25-Aug-2010
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

The Great Diamond Heist by Readywriter52

Excellent

Found tow SPAG---
The found Simon---should be they

but no one ever figure ---should be figured

I liked the story i kept me reading until the end. Your style is accessible and I like the dialogue between Elaina and Simon. Great job with this and good luck in the contest!

Comment Written by R.E. A. on 21-Aug-2010
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Emotional bondage. by dennismackey18

Excellent

First I think you might have this labeled under the wrong category.

The poem itself I think is a wonderful expression as to why you write. Somewhere I've read that stories in your case poetry can hold a person hostage until they write it down. It's probably a common theme for us writers.

I really like the last stanza. Great job on this!

Comment Written by R.E. A. on 21-Aug-2010
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

All That is Splendiferous by adewpearl
Chapter 25 of the book Triolets: Traditional and Modified

Excellent

An uplifting poem that reminds the reader that there are good things in the world. Sometimes its hard to see these things, but they do exist. Beautiful art to match a beautiful messege. Great job. Thanks for the information about the triolet as well. I might have to try one sometime.

Comment Written by R.E. A. on 19-Aug-2010

Moonlit Ocean Waves (haiku) by anabellapongasi
Chapter 2 of the book Nature Twists

Excellent

Great haiku. The picture goes well with your visual description. I also like the rhyme between hull and lullaby. Lovely haiku. The picture really accentuates your words.

Comment Written by R.E. A. on 19-Aug-2010

Going Postal by easyeverett

Excellent

"So now I'm standin' over daddy's grave,
Ten days from calm to ragin' full-blown rave;
Hey daddy! I'm no good and I'm not brave
But I'll be killin' souls your God can't save:
I'm hopin for a score of fifty-three
One soul for every year of wretched me."

I love the language in this stanza. "Ten days from calm to ragin' full blown rave" Great phrase

Paints a dark, but poignant, picture. Great job on this.

Comment Written by R.E. A. on 19-Aug-2010

The Sisters Of Sincerity by easyeverett

Excellent

This is a very emotional poem (memoir?) Great rhythm and rhyme.

"Remember that the Universe
Is vast beyond all creed
And man is just a minute part
Of Universal seed"

I like this stanza.

I also enjoy the ending.

Comment Written by R.E. A. on 19-Aug-2010