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I can totally see this being sung by a choir. It's a fine song, not just a poem in disguise. I'm not a fan of "thru" instead of "through." Not sure what "vamp out" means either. So, other than those two minor quibbles I really liked it. Happy New Year!

Comment Written by Lucian Carter on 29-Dec-2017
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Faith by easyeverett1

Excellent

I hear ya. There are a lot of religions, faiths and philosophies out there. It's so hard to believe that most of them would have to wrong in order for there to be a single right one.

It's a mess, a mess you describe with style and aplomb. Quite enjoyable as well as thought provoking.

Comment Written by Lucian Carter on 28-Dec-2017

Reality Comes To Light Today by danpald

Good

First, it's spelled "fourth" for the number. Forth is for "go forth" and such.

I like most of this poem. It's a tribute to the Christmas season and Jesus as well. The abortion bit feels tacked on, no matter how we feel about the subject, it sours your poem quite a bit.

So, while I like most of this, I'm afraid I'm only giving it "for" stars.

Comment Written by Lucian Carter on 28-Dec-2017

Don't leave me this way by jenintorre

Excellent

I like it, despite it being a collection of quotes, it tells its own story. I'm a child of the 80s myself so I totally get it. It's just flat out fun. Not sure if all the song references would be classed as disco, but close enough for me. Good show.

Comment Written by Lucian Carter on 28-Dec-2017
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Dedicated to the One I Love! by Jannypan (Jan)

Good

I like this, and you paint a glowing picture of your subject.

The problem I have is this doesn't feel like a poem. I think it would have worked better as prose.

I'm torn rating this as it is touching and wonderful, but I'm not that big on the style. So please don't take my 4-star rating as impugning your message or your love. Those are great.

Comment Written by Lucian Carter on 28-Dec-2017

Drive-In Intermission by Sis Cat

Excellent

I love this. I was never a drive-in fan. This makes me wish I had been in the past. Lovely images expressed in lovely language. Swings are fun too. Very well done.

Comment Written by Lucian Carter on 28-Dec-2017

Blessed Are We by Dean Kuch

Excellent

Christian or not, it's good to be grateful for what we have. Given that we have time and access to a computer to write poems and stories, we must be better off than most of the world. You give a good look at what can happen after Christmas and the downer it can be. Your solution is a well thought out one and I'd like to see more people try. Good job.

Comment Written by Lucian Carter on 28-Dec-2017

Exploding At Ground Zero by Dean Kuch

Good

I get your tongue in cheek style, and it works well. The poem is a bit all over the place in terms of subject. Also, in-jokes are all well and good, but they have no life beyond this site. If you can spare a post and promo member bucks for things like this, more power to you. Heck, you win so many contests you probably have a lot to spare :)

Anyway, this isn't a homerun, but nobody hits a home run every at bat. I continue to look forward to all your future work.

Comment Written by Lucian Carter on 28-Dec-2017

It's a sad end. by For better for verse

Excellent

I somehow skipped past the introductory line and the poem struck me hard. Looking back, I think that line is too much of a spoiler. I'd change it.

I like the story you tell and the style you tell it in. Both work. I would capitalize Hell since you are referring to the actual realm, a proper name.

I don't know that you lightened it up a ton, but it elicited an emotionalresponse from me. That tells me it's a great poem.

Comment Written by Lucian Carter on 28-Dec-2017

Shameless Plug by giraffmang

Excellent

But this is a mix of review, ad and recommendations. So, for a shameless plug, I did enjoy it. I hope you attract an audience for this and the plugged works :)

Comment Written by Lucian Carter on 28-Dec-2017