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Y. M. Roger

Peace Be Unto You. by rhonnie69

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Such a beautiful offering of gentleness and peace to start the week off, Rhonnie... perfect reflections on where and in whom we need to be.. :) ;) Thanx for sharing! :) Yvette
Comment Written by Y. M. Roger on 17-Feb-2020

Out With The Old by Miss Cookie Atkinson

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Sometimes a hard one to remember, Miss Cookie, but you are so very right: we must remember that we are his 'presence' to people! :) :) Thank you for that reminder! ;) Yvette
Comment Written by Y. M. Roger on 17-Feb-2020

Wintry scavengers by Auryn Eisley

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A beautiful description of your Japanese Quince ... we tried to have some one year and it didn't make it through the summer... ;( ;( They are bright and fiery, though, aren't they?! :) For your offering, however, you have a 5-7-6 (not 5-7-5 or 17 syllables). Although a haiku allows you some 'wiggle room' on the total syllable count, the maximum it can be is the ceiling of 17 syllables. Your word 'flowering' could be fixed by simply doing the following:

flow'ring

as such eliminates your extra syllable. Hope this helps and best of luck in the contest! :) Yvette
Comment Written by Y. M. Roger on 17-Feb-2020

Waking Up, Spring Has Arrived by Rosemary Everson1

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A wonderful vision for the contest, Rosemary -- thanx for sharing and best of luck, my lady! ;)

As our body draws in the fresh --> Bodies drawing in the fresh [to match the 'ing' sense throughout the poem.... this line seemed 'off']

has awaken from --> has awakened from

to stop petals from --> to stop pedals from

cycle to not go near --> cycle not to go near

Comment Written by Y. M. Roger on 17-Feb-2020

In Vase of Blue by Mrs. KT

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Chills. That's my review, Beautiful Lady... chills. You have such a beautiful sense of emotional ties to the physical that it quite astounding sometimes... I looked at the title before I opened this one and thought, 'hmmmm, what is that Diane up to this time?'... But this, this is perfection in that realm. Why? Well, 'In vase of blue' defines the vessel of your memories - perhaps the former owner of the vase, perhaps the gifter of the vase -- yes, those narcissus put the sunshine over the vase, but that vase and the fact that it 'continues' with your narcissus is where the tears come from... it is a simple message of personal heart that transfers to your reader in the form of ... chills. :) Perfect. Yvette
Comment Written by Y. M. Roger on 17-Feb-2020

Almost by Jayne Pearl

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Except in Horseshoes... almost counts for points in Horseshoes! LOL! Such a fun offering for the day that really had me going there....I was ready for you to continued with another quatrain or two they were so delightful and witty! ;) Thanx for sharing those smiles and chuckles today! ;) Yvette

lottery, almost became a millionaire --> lottery, to become a millionaire [suggestion for 'flow'.... feel free to ignore]

Comment Written by Y. M. Roger on 17-Feb-2020

I Saw the Light by Dolly'sPoems

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Such an awesome one, Dolly... reflective and laced with emotions that you smoothly transfer to your reader: so, they're not all 'princely knights'? lol! And friends are certainly what will stay along the path... thanx for sharing, my lady! ;) Yvette
Comment Written by Y. M. Roger on 17-Feb-2020

Victoria Secrets by Miss Cookie Atkinson

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Well, Miss Cookie, that certainly put a big smile on my face today so I know little Madison's comment had you grinning from ear to ear!! ;) Thank you for sharing such an uplifting offering of both wearing our age with a big smile and enjoying our grandchildren in the process!! ;) Yvette

Victoria Secret sound more refine --> 'Victoria Secrets' sound more refined

"look grandma --> "Look grandma

was " I glad for you dear. --> was "I'm glad for you dear."

mother call me --> mother called me

are wearing Victoria Secret. --> are wearing Victoria Secrets! [think the exclamation mark is warranted here, don't you? So perfect a line - sweet Madison!!]
Comment Written by Y. M. Roger on 17-Feb-2020

Mother is a teacher by littlebit69

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A free verse reflection on the attributes of a mother laced with both experience and advice for all mothers... thank you sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
Comment Written by Y. M. Roger on 17-Feb-2020

Lei Flower by lyenochka

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What a unique offering for the non-fiction contest, Helen, and what a beautiful way to reflect on a lifetime of love of your family and your family home!! :) Well-written with an awesome presentation style! ;) Thanx for sharing such a special piece of you and best of luck! ;) Yvette
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