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Y. M. Roger

Existential Threats by Robert Zimmerman

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Oh, Z, if I had any hope of a sixer at this point, it would be yours.... I'm afraid I was out around 30 or so ago!! (was over 120...at least I'm in the eighties now - ugh!)... I hate to tell you this, but you have found your rhythym with this ballad meter, sir -- you can make it sing!! ;) :) Wonderful humor-laced offering....., and that's not evening joke!! ;) :) LOL! ;) Thanx for sharing!! ;) :) Yvette
Comment Written by Y. M. Roger on 07-Dec-2019

Blazing Green and Ever Gold by Michael McCottry Bell Jr

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What a beautiful offering, Michael, and while I am not an expert on sonnets, Spenserian or Shakespearean or otherwise, I just love the feminine beauty you are able to convey and 'paint'... especially as her heart gets more beautiful with age and is able to keep her lover's old 'always new'... :) :) Thanx for sharing! ;)
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Never Say Never

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Great advice here in your free verse offering for the contest -- love the Western theme to match the dialect and the 'grandpa' for advice! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
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Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Snowflake (an acrostic poem) by Rosemary Everson1

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A complete description of a winter scene and all the activities the children enjoy when the white stuff comes calling!! ;) :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
Be sure to pop back in there and highlight your 'O' in blue... :) :)
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Arlington Tears by Lobber

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Wow.... quite a jarring offering for the contest, sir, but well rhymed and definitely carrying impact to the reader.... the somber message rings clearly through. Thank you.

Best wishes in the contest! :) Yvette
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We Heard Something by country ranch writer

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What a fun interpretation for this prompt -- thanx for sharing your experiences!! ;) :)

other signaling to --> other, we signaled to

slowly moved our way to --> slowly made our way to

Deer pass through there all the time so it --> Deer passed through there all the time, so it

our latter stands sitting motionless as she --> our ladder stands and sat motionless as she

stuff not caring if anyone heard them till they --> stuff, not caring if anyone heard them until they

a distance we heard --> the distance we heard

Makes a shiver run up and down your spine; like -->> The sound makes a shiver run up and down your spine, like

deer jerky we sat --> deer jerky, we sat

Air was cold and brisk blowing across our face soon our --> The air was cold and brisk blowing across our face. Soon, our

Suddenly we spotted --> Suddenly, we spotted

Luckily the deer --> Luckily, the deer

around we got --> around, we got

turning off colder --> turning colder

put or jackets --> put our jackets

out, our fingers liked to have froze --> out - our fingers almost froze OR out because our fingers almost

the way my friend --> the way, my friend

there as pretty as you please was --> there, as pretty as you please, was

Suddenly a herd of does came flying through scaring --> Suddenly, a herd of does came flying through, scaring

out trip was a bust so we --> our trip was a bust, so we

for ticks we settled --> for ticks, we settled

night putting another --> night, putting another

five in the morning, and, soon, the whole
Comment Written by Y. M. Roger on 07-Dec-2019

Eye Witness by dkblack

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This is an excellent idea for this prompt, DK -- great job!! Thanx for sharing, ma'am, and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette

something, and, I --> something and, I

Okay." Dena --> Okaaaaay," Dena [comma is a fix, the other is a suggestion]

heard, but feeling --> heard but feeling

friendship; she had decided to just get --> friendship, Molly decided to get

But first she did ask, " Did Matt --> But, first, she did ask, "Did Matt

schedule, and, from the look --> schedule. From the look

answered, then ended the conversation, abruptly, because Matt --> answered. She then ended the conversation because Matt

Then speaking to Molly, said, "This --> She then turned to Molly. "This

last night, and will be --> last night and will be

meant these words --> meant those words
Comment Written by Y. M. Roger on 07-Dec-2019

Snowflake (A Snowman's Saga) by Mystic Angel 7777

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What a wonderful 'countdown' offering that blends the snowman and the true meaning... :) :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
Comment Written by Y. M. Roger on 07-Dec-2019

The heart of enticement by Lobber

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This s a very unique and alliterative offering for the contest, sir -- great visual such that the pic is just a bonus! ;) :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
Comment Written by Y. M. Roger on 07-Dec-2019

Scene at a Christmas Shop 8 CC by Bill Schott

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Oh, you are just really having fun with this one.... I'm thinking we might oughta limit the egg nog intake these days, yeah? :) :)
Please forgive my 'running behind' again ... as mid-terms close in, my tutoring schedule has ballooned and my 'free time' has all but vanished! Exams are next week so there is a light at the end of the tunnel - LOL! :) A very Merry Christmas to you from my little corner of the world!! ;) Yvette
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