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The Awdl Dawdle Warble by Dolly'sPoems

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I grabbed hold of this poem because the title caught my eye - Awdl Dawdle. Fun filled. Good rhymes such as "grave" and "rave" as well as "write" and Kite". Ten syllables in each line as a sonnet should contain. Good internal rhyme of "braves" and "stave". Enjoyed this one. Something different. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written by GinnieD on 02-Apr-2019

Holloway Prison by sandramitchell
Chapter 9 of the book This Time - That Time 3

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Those women must have lost their common sense to charge the police like they did. Smart thinking to jump into the back of a van undetected. The notion of going to prison would become a harsh reality for these women. Seems "Gladys" caught a break being released from prison even if "Charles" does know she got arrested. That left "Mildred' to face the consequences of her actions. Then, at the end, you moved her from a gripping scene to her home in 1996? That seemed to change the texture of the story somewhat.
Comment Written by GinnieD on 18-Oct-2018

Project Good Vibrations by Jannypan (Jan)

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Not much on imbibing videos into written pieces, but how apropos that you selected the Beach Boys "Good Vibrations" to accompany this one. When I read the title that was the first thought that came to mind. Often, seventeen syllables is not a lot of space to say something meaningful. However, you nailed this one. Joy can be very contagious. Many people find it hard to express what is in their heart and keep their emotions bottled up inside them, never allowing those "good vibrations" to reflect onto others. If they would let them ooze out the joyous feelings may be precisely what somebody else needed at that moment.
Comment Written by GinnieD on 18-Oct-2018
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Facing the Enemy by Mistydawn
Chapter 4 of the book Death by Delivery

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"make it to far" should be "make it too far". Seems "Nick" is in a heap of hot water with drugs in his vehicle and a possible tie-in to murders committed. He has several good reasons to fear being pulled over by the coppers. Detailed death scene with the four bodies "Rachel" investigates. Lot of ongoing action illustrated. Plenty of human reactions to the grisly discovery of the mutilated corpses. A certain mystery as to why so many bodies keel over from "tainted" drugs keeps the storyline intriguing.
Comment Written by GinnieD on 17-Oct-2018

Heart by Insider98

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Don't know about the heart being a fail-safe. Many times it leads in the wrong direction when it comes to love. The heart is so fascinating, as you said, you can break it and it does keep beating, even if you think it won't after a relationship has ended. An interesting entry for this contest. Another thing I personally like about this poem is that you allow it to stand on its own merit and not re-enforce the poem with a picture, video, or other distraction.
Comment Written by GinnieD on 16-Oct-2018

The Secrets of Oceania by Sugarray77

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The world under the sea is an amazing place. This poem contains good rhymes including "whirl/ curl," "flow/below," and "trained/constrained". The illusion painted is clear, and terms such as "shipwrecked graves" further demonstrate the theme of the poem. The first stanza enlightens the context and the third portrays the depths will not be held in. An enjoyable read.
Comment Written by GinnieD on 16-Oct-2018

Alone and Happy by zlp22

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Loneliness is certainly not a crime and some people remain that way because they prefer the lifestyle regardless of what many people believe. This poem captures the essence of this contest well. Being able to do your own thing, without having someone to answer to, has its benefits.
Comment Written by GinnieD on 14-Oct-2018

The Red Dress by Kay Seed

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The misfortunate of a woman being barren. For some, this is more than they can stand. Seems you are having a difficult time dealing with the situation. Colorful, descriptive language adds another dimension to this poem. Perhaps, if you keep trying the situation will change for the better. Or, maybe, just maybe, the barrenness if by choice?
Comment Written by GinnieD on 14-Oct-2018

As I Listen by kiwijenny

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Since I reside in Florida, of course the picture of the water caught my eye. First stanza poses an interesting question indeed. Wouldn't you have liked to of been privy to that conversation? Poem tells the story of the redemption of mankind in a different means of illustration. Good rhyme scheme used throughout including "waves and saves". However L1 and L2 do not follow this rhyme pattern. Any particular reason for that?
Comment Written by GinnieD on 14-Oct-2018

Summer Dreaming by RodG

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"outa" should be "outta". Coming of age stories can make interesting reading. This one begins on a farm with gramps. Seems you did not understand that little trinket boys undertake called puberty. At the end of the story, you come to the realization "Sadie" did not love you. Oh well, better luck next time in that department. Somehow, those daisy petals never lied, did they?
Comment Written by GinnieD on 14-Oct-2018
Read and reviewed with blinders on.


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