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Darlene Franklin

Morning Air Blankets by Gypsy Blue Rose

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I like the mood of morning air blankets the mossy paths. It just feels like fall, the extended hours of darknesses, the increasing ground cover underfoot. I confess I'm puzzled by the bark. Is it a dog or is it a metaphor for something else?
Comment Written by Darlene Franklin on 28-Feb-2020

Bless the Lord Today! by Teri7

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Psalm 103. Oh, thank you for lifting my heart this morning. Whenever I look for spiritual poetry that is uplifting and taken from the pages of scripture in the Fanstory pages, so often I'm led to you! Thanks for your words offered to the Lord.
Comment Written by Darlene Franklin on 28-Feb-2020

Rooted And Grounded In Love by Sandra du Plessis
Chapter 127 of the book Daily Blessings from God

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Those from Ephesians are among my favorites in the Bible. Thank you for bringing them to mind.

Sandra, I am dedicating an upcoming book of poetry to you, since you introduced me to the Sapphinic Triad, and I am using it for all my poems in a chapbook about God's hands.
Comment Written by Darlene Franklin on 27-Feb-2020

Season Splendour by Sandra du Plessis

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Good description of the transformation of winter into spring, and effective use of your chosen words. There's a couple of typos in the second stanza you might want to address.
Comment Written by Darlene Franklin on 27-Feb-2020

The Garden of Spring by poetwatch

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Sun smiling through its sunshine. I love the image. I also love the lines about loving your neighbor as you love your garden. Since I'm not much of a gardener, it doesn't apply to me, but say, to love my neighbor as much as I love poetry . . . to give as much care and attention to them . . .
Comment Written by Darlene Franklin on 27-Feb-2020
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Complicated Beauty by Y. M. Roger

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Very clever! You turned the instructions on their head. Let's face it, the poem might have been boring without all th ose high-falutin' words. Did you know most of them before you started writing the poem? And following the complicated lines with the simple refrain. What a lot of fun.
Comment Written by Darlene Franklin on 27-Feb-2020
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Anticipation by Jeffrey L. Michaux

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I love the yellow carpets! Laid in rows as the winds blows (and I'm a poet and don't know it). I love the allitration of the spl and the spr words, with s and p sprinkled in as well.
Comment Written by Darlene Franklin on 27-Feb-2020
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Come Spend Time With Me by rwilliam
Chapter 22 of the book Safe To Remember

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Oh, a miracle occurred indeed, freeing you to move forward. Thank you sharing!
I loved that reading of the psalm. Which version is it (you probably should tell us)
Word of warning: I'm not sure about the law in putting up scripture in a venue like this. But if you're seeking publication on a broad scale, a word of warning. But I'm looking into extensively for a book I'm writing. The scripture can't be more than 25% of what you've written/
Having said that, I can understand why you wanted to include. How can you restate something so powerfully put in the Word of God? We can't. What you wrote was beautiful, describing what God said to you that day and how it changed you.
Comment Written by Darlene Franklin on 27-Feb-2020

Hydrangea by Dolly'sPoems

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This one works for me. I can see the hyndrangea through your words, with some new insights. The rhyme was easy to follow. All these poems on flowers are making me hungry for spring!
Comment Written by Darlene Franklin on 27-Feb-2020

A Spring Poem by JLR

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I like the image of the does and fauns for the poem, and capturing the dew on their tongues, Typo? Either Night's darkness ebbs shorter of Nights darkness ebb shorter. Like the expression "Morn sun earlier fetched."
Comment Written by Darlene Franklin on 26-Feb-2020
Read and reviewed with blinders on.


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