Contact Us | En español    
         Join today or login

PeterRHW

Praise Your Toilet by Louise Michelle

Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Well Lou, I had the feeling I'd seen this poem somewhere before but, of course, I'd never accuse somebody as upstanding as yourself of plagiarism. Then as I sat on my toilet in great meditation it came to me with great relief. It's a question that's come up before and you're in the clear - it's no crime to plagiarise yourself! Haha!
It's a great poem and I'm sure you're flushed with pride, I've been looking for inspiration and at last I have something to go on.
Sorry for the ramble, I love the poem.
Hugs, Peter
Comment Written by PeterRHW on 04-Apr-2020

Mother Nature's Not So Nice by Louise Michelle

Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Great Limerickery Lou, using the form with brilliant last lines to enhance the comic effect. But the wording! You've really excelled yourself with this one; "oodles of noodles," indeed, you certainly brightened up my morning whatever the weather. Line two, a lovely pun, there are indeed two types of mother. Haha! "Kit and caboodle," haven't heard that for a few years. Anyway, you knocked me off my feet with this one.
Hugs, Peter
Comment Written by PeterRHW on 09-Mar-2020

It Was Just Hyperbole by Louise Michelle

Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Hyperbole is things we say which are not meant to be taken literally - and from your poem we can now see why they're not! I'll definitely be careful what promises I make from now on. Haha!
One small comment: I see from other reviews their was some confusion over, "snatch you stars," and, while it is quite logical, I had to read it twice to catch your meaning. Maybe something like, "I'll bring you stars," might be a little easier on those of us readers with limited intellect?
Anyway, I'd sell my horse and dog to have written this poem myself, great stuff Lou, I love it.
Hugs, Peter
Comment Written by PeterRHW on 01-Oct-2019

The Party's Done by Louise Michelle

Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

I just had to give you six for this Lou as, once again, you describe so accurately a road I've travelled a few times myself. You've tried everything except a "Get the hell out!" which or course would break our code of social politeness. So why does this poem make me chuckle? The words reflect the developing annoyance so well but, at the same time, this poem makes us laugh at ourselves. Another great piece of work.
Best wishes, Peter
Comment Written by PeterRHW on 17-Sep-2019

Summer Sap Is Slowing by LisaMay

Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

This beautifully described complexity of the relationship between humans and trees makes yours a poem that must be reread and pondered upon. The tree, the tree of life and the cycle of life all interwoven with carefully chosen words and phrases. I enjoyed this poem immensely.
Best wishes, Peter
Comment Written by PeterRHW on 08-Sep-2019

Words Unspoken by Dolly'sPoems

Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Hi Dolly. I do enjoy a well composed sonnet - and when I get a poetry lesson into the bargain that's sensational! You've tackled the complexities of a dysfunctional but enduring relationship sensitively and the complexities of this form masterfully. Great writing, I love it!
Best wishes, Peter
Comment Written by PeterRHW on 06-Sep-2019

Meditating Makes Me Nervous by Louise Michelle

Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

I guess it's all that nonsense running through the brain that makes up poets? I like the oxymoron, "forced relaxation," it sums the whole thing up for me, the harder you try to ignore something, the more the damn thing keeps running round your inside your head. Once again Lou, you've turned a familiar event into a hilarious poem - it certainly made me laugh.
Hugs, Peter
Comment Written by PeterRHW on 25-Aug-2019

Cold Water Creek by juliaSjames

Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

I thought at first this would be a Rondel, but continuing reading I do like the form you use here. In the first stanza you paint the scene in both colour and ambience, followed the playful frolics of youth and ending with the thought filled reminiscing of age. I think the way you tweak the repeating lines works really well, with the final line bringing an aura of timelessness to the poem. Wish I could join you by the creek.
Best wishes, Peter
Comment Written by PeterRHW on 31-Jul-2019

Drowning Sorrow by Dolly'sPoems

Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Hi Dolly. I was looking for a good poem and came across this. You relate your story without preaching the evils of strong liquor or passing judgement, I like that. For me, it's important in a poem that the form blends with and enhances the subject, something you've managed so well here - even thrown in a little slant rhyme as if to remind us that nobody's perfect. Haha!
This dismal episode does not (for me anyway) subtract from the enjoyment of reading excellent poetry.
Best wishes, Peter
Comment Written by PeterRHW on 31-Jul-2019

Degrees of Intelligence by Rachelle Allen

Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

I sent a link to this to my daughter who has just completed her BSc in Australia, I'm sure she'll be amused. Your teacher was, of course, right - but you have to learn the rules before you can start bending and breaking them. Your poetic echo of his humorous 'snarky' sarcasm would appear to be a backhanded tribute to him insomuch as you have remembered his words. So it's well said by him and well written by you. Loved it!

Best regards, Peter
Comment Written by PeterRHW on 08-Jul-2019


Page: 1 Next Page



  Contact Us © 2014 FanStory.com, Inc. All Rights Reserved. Terms under which this service is provided to you. Privacy Statement