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Suzanna Ray

Cracks in the Foundation by sammielwf

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Dear sammie, It is amazing how much emotion this staged event generated, but the words of your four line poem are not far off the mark. The foundation upon which our forefathers built this country, looks a great deal like your illustration.
Comment Written by Suzanna Ray on 22-Jan-2021

All The World Is A Stage by jaybird1

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Dear Jay, Your rhymes are sort of rough but that does not seem to deter those who love what you write because of the content and the sentiment that you express.
Perhaps the blue ribbon above also reflects how generously you promote your posts.
You should try posting a poem paying one point and 32 cents to see what appreciation is left for your words of wisdom.
Comment Written by Suzanna Ray on 22-Jan-2021

Seaworthy Dhow by JLR

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Dear JLR, This is a great read and your illustration is fascinating. But I am somewhat confused because your comments are saying this post is a sonnet, and you show the rhyme scheme in your post. but unless you put a comma at the end of the first line, you have invalidated your very first rhyme.
I would suggest that you delete the 1st line, the poem does not need it.
Comment Written by Suzanna Ray on 22-Jan-2021

Senior Citizens attacked by lancellot

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Dear lancellot, into the fray you boldly go with flags of truth flying, your words defying, those that are lying, to stand up and deny it. Sadly politicians are masters of media manipulation. I wonder what they would say about your post?
Comment Written by Suzanna Ray on 22-Jan-2021

The Race by JLR

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Dear JLR, I hope your other club members will admire your efforts to comply with the challenges presented by Tercets, While I admire your introduction of a turtle into this story, (based on Aesop's fables) when only two rabbits are shown in the picture you were given to write about.
Comment Written by Suzanna Ray on 21-Jan-2021

Through the Pillars: Arrival by Bill Schott

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Dear Bill, I see we are going to get some solid scientific information along with this sci-fi presentation of a futuristic Bot. I am not sure if Bots are real, or still found only in comic books, but you have bravely gone where few writers have gone before, and invented a whole new kind of being, who's abilities are only going to be revealed, one by one, in future posts.
Comment Written by Suzanna Ray on 21-Jan-2021

Words Hurt by karenina

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Dear karenina, every time you post a story or poem like this, I have to put a shield of armor around my heart that it not be pierced by all the arrows of the true things you say About man's inhumanity to his fellow man, his neglect to stand up and protect those around him that he sees are being abused, and the excuses he uses to justify his own cowardice.
Comment Written by Suzanna Ray on 21-Jan-2021

Slug's Everest by lyenochka

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Dear Helen, I did tell you, did I not, that between your cell phone photos, your quick wit and magic pen; you could write a poem like this every day.
I also need to say that your authors notes are a very valuable asset to each of your posts; because so many people may not have ever heard of the men who climbed Mount Everest.
Comment Written by Suzanna Ray on 21-Jan-2021

Covid Angels by Melissa Russell Deur

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Dear Melissa, I like your personification of God (that he could even breathe,) I wish you would've picked another word besides HOT ( I would suggest WARM because it does not mess up your syllable count ) that way you have left behind a wonderful and thoughtful poem.

I love the idea of God lifting up both those who work to nurse those with Covid, and those who have died from it.
Comment Written by Suzanna Ray on 21-Jan-2021

Review of Hillbilly Elegy by lancellot

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Dear lancellot, I am sorry I will not be able to watch the movie myself because we do not have Netflix. But that does not change my reaction to your script which I think carries very interesting messages, It's very well written, and ends on a very upbeat note; which is the best way to start your fan story day.
Comment Written by Suzanna Ray on 21-Jan-2021


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