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Sophia Delgado

God in Hiding by Darlene Franklin
Chapter 6 of the book Knowing God

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Thank you for this. I've really been struggling recently and am constantly asking God why he isn't showing Himself to me anymore. I know I've been told these things, but seeing them again in detail is a good reminder. I'm curious to check out more of your book now.
Comment Written by Sophia Delgado on 19-Sep-2019
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Workplace Conscientiousness by Rachelle Allen
Chapter 16 of the book A Fly on the Wall

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Am I binge-reading these? Yes. Am I enjoying it? Absolutely. How do you make these so interesting?? Maybe I'll start a journal of daily life to find interest in simple things...
Comment Written by Sophia Delgado on 14-Jul-2019

Till Death Do Us Part -Chapter 7 by Tootie
Chapter 7 of the book Love Long Distance

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This is beautiful and vivid! Each character has a distinct voice. I love the addition of the story Billy wrote and wonder if it has some foreshadowing to it. I love the inclusion of faith as well. I hope he's ok.
Comment Written by Sophia Delgado on 14-Jul-2019

the pool by Tanvi Pauddar

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I love it! Such a fun and lighthearted story. It made me smile. I wish I were Lisa or Jessica, I could use some swimming and cupcakes.

Small grammar thing: no need for a comma after Jessica Brown in the first line.

I look forwards to reading more!
Comment Written by Sophia Delgado on 14-Jul-2019

The Puppeteers by kiwisteveh

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This is incredible. It's filled with beautiful verses and a deep, powerful meaning. The metaphor of a puppet is perfect and an accurate, figurative depiction of who we are until we let go, and let the craftsman snip the strings that hold us down. Thank you for sharing, I think you have a great shot at winning the contest!
Comment Written by Sophia Delgado on 16-Jun-2019

God's Glade by Mystic Angel 7777

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This is a beautiful and powerful poem that reminds us that, though we are small and may feel insignificant, we are cared for. The way you structured it very interesting. It almost follows a pattern of 6 - 5 - 4 - 3 - 2 lines in each stanza, except for the second and third which both have 4.

Some rhythms in the first stanza are a bit off (if you're not going for rhythm, you can ignore this!). The fourth line has 2 extra syllables that don't match the line it rhymes with, "In which an arbor grows," which has 6 syllables. If you take away "build" to make it "no human hand could sow," it would fit in the meter. I love it the way it is as well; you may have been going for a more free-verse poetry, in which case it's perfect as it is.

Thank you for sharing, and good luck in the contest!

Sophia
Comment Written by Sophia Delgado on 16-Jun-2019
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Vanished in Thin Air by Liberty Justice

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Very mysterious! I can tell there is an untold story behind it, and though we can make any prediction we want, we may never truly know what happened to these victims. It's dangerous to venture out alone, but so many of us thirst for adventure.
Comment Written by Sophia Delgado on 16-Jun-2019

Nothing Changes by Dolly'sPoems

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I love the way you illustrate that whatever goes on in our personal worlds, life goes on all the same. I like the way you rhymed "poverty" and "fancy free". Just because everything around us may change, we can stand firm in who we are. Great message and great poem. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written by Sophia Delgado on 15-Jun-2019

Timeless by Chip Kuzborski

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This is awesome! I love the way you incorporated "sands of time" figuratively and literally, using the image of a sandcastle--innocent and playful--and comparing it to the deeper and darker concept of time sifting away. The syllable-per-line scheme doesn't feel forced. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written by Sophia Delgado on 15-Jun-2019

Bullet Points by karenina

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This is incredible. You've infused so much meaning and power into just 100 words, and I love the way you opened it with something so innocent that quickly led to the main point of the poem. I absolutely agree with you. Society used to develop opinions and thoughts through communication and observation. Now, some of us do whatever we can to get our way, no matter how drastic it may be.
Comment Written by Sophia Delgado on 15-Jun-2019


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