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God Paints The Desert by Barb Hensongispsaca
Chapter 8 of the book 2019 part 4

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I love geology and this poem amply illustrates the knowledge and awe that comes from the study of the "earth," as well as the difficulty describing it in pictures or words. Your final stanza sums all up nicely. Thank you for the poem.
Comment Written by ShyWri on 04-Sep-2019

The Length of Darkness by victortouche

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This is an interesting free verse poem which seems to have decided to rhyme midway through. It takes a personal look at loss and depression. Like a lot of free verse poems, in only my opinion, it could use editing and tightening up to make it more powerful. Thank you for the poem.
Comment Written by ShyWri on 04-Sep-2019

Smokey the Cat by Marie Foster1

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Hahahaha! So glad you picked him. We have sisters from a shelter and their personalities are like night and day. This is a lovely ditty about your glad and if this doesn't make him smile, nothing will. Thank you for the poem.
Comment Written by ShyWri on 04-Sep-2019
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Lunch Break by Sandra du Plessis

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It seems to me the pantoum is one of the more difficult poems to write well and this is a fine example. It vividly illustrates the photo and dramatically gives a sense of the danger of the daily lives of the men who were building our dramatic skylines. Thank you for the poem.
Comment Written by ShyWri on 03-Sep-2019

It's That Time Again by Joanna S. Blue

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This is a gentle reminder of the precariousness of our daily lives. What was once a safe adventure-sending our children to a new grade- now comes with anxiety. Thank you for the cinquain. (PS my cinquain muse has definitely flown the coop)
Comment Written by ShyWri on 01-Sep-2019

Heat and Light by Joanna S. Blue

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This is another excellent poem about a current event. I can almost see lightning cracking day into night. I wonder if the Amazon will get any rain from the hurricane that is forming.Thank you for the poem.
Comment Written by ShyWri on 26-Aug-2019

The fading moon... by royowen

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You use rhyme and rhythm very effectively in this lyrical poem. To me it seems you have an assortment of ideas--hope for a better day, the mystery of creation, not wasting talents--and that the poem might have been even better with some careful editing for idea continuity. Maybe stick to one big theme. Just my opinion. Thank you for the poem.
Comment Written by ShyWri on 24-Aug-2019

Before It Is Too Late by easyeverett

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Poetry is rarely used for political commentary, unless as satire, but you have managed to use rhyme effectively to express your opinions. Thank you for sharing the poem.
Comment Written by ShyWri on 24-Aug-2019

Pantoum for a New FanStory Class by Pantygynt

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LOL. What a fun ride through this well-written poem about the study of poetic forms! I won't be taking the class due to time constraints, but I will be googling these forms. Thank you for sharing the poem.
Comment Written by ShyWri on 24-Aug-2019

Forbidden Pleasure by nomi338

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This is a well-written poem with astute observations about the consequences of adolescent passion. What a shame that teens often don't have the guidance and supervision to help them mature in a responsible way. Thank you for the poem.
Comment Written by ShyWri on 24-Aug-2019


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