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Melodie Michelle

Lost in a Dream by Brittany H.

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I did enjoy reading this poem entry for the ABC Poetry Contest ~ Best wishes on the win!

I adore your pastel colored background and the imagery used! Makes for a nice presentation.

If I could change one thing it would be to insert line breaks and make stanzas out of them. It is difficult to follow and read otherwise, with all the words running together!

Thank you so much for sharing;-) Many blessings to you and your family;-) Have an amazing day;-)
Comment Written by Melodie Michelle on 12-Aug-2020

The Music Still Plays

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EXCELLENT poem, ESPECIALLY for the Rhythm Poetry contest! Good luck on the win;-)

The poem itself flows nicely and the imagery is outstanding;-) The background color is gorgeous and it all comes together in a neat pkg for an impeccable presentation!

Thank you so much for sharing;-) Many blessings to you and your family;-) Have an amazing day;-)
Comment Written by Melodie Michelle on 12-Aug-2020
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Promises

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If I could offer you one suggestion it would be to change the background color and possibly the font size and color as well!
White is such a put off uninviting color and this poem about spring needs a brighter cheerier color;-)

Thank you so much for sharing;-) Many blessings to you and your family;-) Have an amazing day;-)
Comment Written by Melodie Michelle on 12-Aug-2020
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Drowned City

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If I had to change something, it would be to add an image that will tie in with your words and colors chosen!

I would also consider changing the background color and possibly the font size and color. The white makes it look uninviting and cold. You need a brighter and warmer color for this piece.

Thank you so much for sharing;-) Many blessings to you and your family;-) Have an amazing day;-)
Comment Written by Melodie Michelle on 12-Aug-2020
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Waves to Dream By by CrystieCookie999

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I adore the 2-2-5-7-5 5 line poem and is a perfect entry for the Five Line Poetry Contest! Best Wishes on the win;-)

I adore the imagery, the poem, and the background color. Those make it come together for a nice presentation! Your words flow perfectly and this is well written;-)

I appreciate and thank you for sharing;-) Have an amazing day! May God bless you and your family;-)
Comment Written by Melodie Michelle on 11-Aug-2020

Shuffling for Turns by Ben B.
Chapter 8 of the book A Dozen Wishes Around the Globe

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Well written prose! Your characters are exemplary and the storyline is extremely creative and interesting;-) It kept me wanting to know more!

I appreciate and thank you for sharing;-) Have an amazing day! May God bless you and your family;-)
Comment Written by Melodie Michelle on 11-Aug-2020

Recognition by Steven Hicks

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EXCELLENT story! The characters are very likeable and they interact nicely;-) This is well written prose and the storyline is creative and interesting as well!

I appreciate and thank you for sharing;-) Have an amazing day! May God bless you and your family;-)
Comment Written by Melodie Michelle on 11-Aug-2020

Remember by oliver818

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This is beautiful prose but I believe it would be an excellent free verse poem! In my opinion, that is;-)

I appreciate and thank you for sharing;-) Have an amazing day! May God bless you and your family;-)
Comment Written by Melodie Michelle on 11-Aug-2020

My Terrifying Weekend by Angela Paulson

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Good job on this story! There are a few things that need your attention:

Typo: ("Anyway, I was in a call ...")
Change to ("Anyway, I was on a call ...")

Typo: ("All I can say was thank god")
Change to ("All I can say was thank God")

Typo: ("and I am the peranoid one.")
Change spelling of paranoid.

You are clearly talented just pay more attention to detail;-)

I appreciate and thank you for sharing;-) Have an amazing day and may God bless you and your family;-)
Comment Written by Melodie Michelle on 10-Aug-2020

Animal by Cassandra Pearce

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EXCELLENT free verse entry for the free verse poetry contest!

I would suggest, however, that you add an image that would your together the poem and colors.

Another suggestion would be to change the background color bc white is to cold and distant! This poem needs a warmer cheerier color;-)

I appreciate and thank you for sharing;-) Have a beautiful day and may God bless you and your family;-)
Comment Written by Melodie Michelle on 10-Aug-2020


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