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Elizabeth Emerald

Off the Beaten Path by judiverse

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Clever title segues to the thought-provoking verse--this resonates with me, having reinvented myself every decade or so--indeed, when you muster the nerve to detour, adventure awaits. Nice work!
Comment Written by Elizabeth Emerald on 28-Feb-2021

Representative Rainey by lyenochka

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Gripping story--heartwrenching and inspirational--brilliant bio of this magnificent man lost to standard history lessons--kudos for the resurrection.
Comment Written by Elizabeth Emerald on 28-Feb-2021

A Frosty Reception by Debra White
Chapter 3 of the book Haiku 2021

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Fabulous! Brilliant from top to tail--witty title--clever wordplay: trumpets herald--premature fanfare. Many will be relieved to see this is not a contest entry!
Comment Written by Elizabeth Emerald on 28-Feb-2021

Further Teenage Trouble by BethShelby
Chapter 106 of the book Remembering Yesterday

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I confess I was howling at the "diagnosis"--nowadays, to label a child as "JD" is not PC! I enjoyed the chuckle, given that you already told me Connie turned out great. Thanks for the notes--sugg: In the title, tell us the year this episode takes place.

the $25 an hour she was getting as a tutor==don't you mean you were paying to have her tutored?



Comment Written by Elizabeth Emerald on 28-Feb-2021

Captive To Your Love by LisaMay

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Thanks for the heads-up that this is a metaphorical parrot--though even a dunce like me would figure it out from this poignant poem--brilliant phrasing--always a but ...
Comment Written by Elizabeth Emerald on 28-Feb-2021

The Painter's Predicament by LisaMay

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Devilishly clever limerick septet. Gruesome ending. Blood-stained ... hmmm--were you perhaps inspired by a recent misadventure involving ruined carpet?
Comment Written by Elizabeth Emerald on 28-Feb-2021

My Most Serious Problem by Monica Chaddick

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Heartrending. Now I see what you mean that Ethel says she had a hard life--but so did you. This narrative style is masterfully understated--you let the devastating circumstances speak for themselves.
Comment Written by Elizabeth Emerald on 28-Feb-2021

Football Chapter 12 part 1 by barbara.wilkey
Chapter 24 of the book Football - A Novel

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Overall, dialog and interactions are credible. You skillfully convey the depeening of their relationship.

Sugg: Make end/beginning section break clear with more spaces and different fonts.

The first sentence is oddly-worded: Katherine stretched inside (?) and then walked out when Gabriel and Reggie came into view.
Comment Written by Elizabeth Emerald on 28-Feb-2021

The Way of Tea by C2

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Startling imagery--transcendent fingers--whisking--into the universe. The note merits its own post--thanks for providing context for the tea ceremony.
Comment Written by Elizabeth Emerald on 28-Feb-2021

A More Open Verdict? by Pantygynt
Chapter 20 of the book More Grist to the Mill

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Gripping--brilliant conversation flows naturally and fills in the backstory--interesting, albeit unlikley, propsect--suicide note but accidentally fell whilst getting up the nerve to jump!
Comment Written by Elizabeth Emerald on 28-Feb-2021


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