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Jessica Borras

When Lilacs Bloom'd by Mrs. KT

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What a lovely poem, and what an interesting style! I'd never heard of The Golden Shovel, but you'd better believe this is a challenge I'll be taking on! I really don't have any critiques as your poem was beautifully written. I loved the vocabulary you used. The words you chose all flow so elegantly, and it's obvious they were chosen carefully. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written by Jessica Borras on 25-Aug-2021

Are the good times really over by rockinm76233

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I very much enjoyed reading this! What an interesting idea, breaking down a song and responding to the music... And I must say, for the most part, I agree wholeheartedly. But there are many of us out here still praying for our country, and for our fellow Americans, and if we keep that up I think things will turn out okay. Well, that, and teaching our younger generation respect and common courtesy. I don't know when that became a thing of the past, but I'm guessing around the same time that social media took off.

The only thing I noticed was the line "But what are we to finally do to stop this (agonizing) fear that America as we knew it, no longer will exist?", I'd suggest swapping agonizes with agonizing. Otherwise, this was very well written and quite enjoyable to read.

Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written by Jessica Borras on 25-Aug-2021

Parking by Lana Marie

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Well, you definitely managed the passionate part of the challenge and kudos on doing it without vulgarity! Your poem was very well written, and you chose a gorgeous picture to go with it. I did notice, "My cheeks blush as my mind starts to wander, passion exploding like lightning and thunder" is the only line not separated into two. For all I know, you did it on purpose, but just in case it was unintentional, thought I'd point it out. Great job on the poem, and good luck with the contest!
Comment Written by Jessica Borras on 25-Aug-2021
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Fresh Bread by Anne Arthur

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What a lovely story! Honestly, there's nothing better than the smell of fresh bread from a local bakery first thing in the morning. Well, except maybe the smell of fresh coffee... Just a heads up, your picture didn't come through. But it's a very nice memory, thank you for sharing it with us :) And good luck with the contest!
Comment Written by Jessica Borras on 25-Aug-2021

Come Back to Me by Eunice Amero

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This is a very well-written poem with loads of emotion. The rhythm is beautiful, it flows very nicely. Just one suggestion, regarding the punctuation. On some lines, you've used it, and on others, you haven't. I would suggest keeping it uniform throughout the entire poem, otherwise, it's a tiny bit distracting.

That's the only suggestion, though. It's a lovely poem. I can feel the heartache while reading it, and any literature that can make you feel is good literature, in my book.
Comment Written by Jessica Borras on 25-Aug-2021
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Little Brother by Mary Shifman

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This is such a sweet poem! It's funny because you could have been describing a toddler, or a grown man. (Specifically, my husband comes to mind lol) Your rhyming flows very nicely, it doesn't feel at all forced.

If I could make one tiny suggestion, the line "When he's like frisky puppy" reads differently than the rest of your poem and might sound more uniform if you make it "When he's like a frisky puppy".

This was a lovely poem. It's obvious you love your brother very much. Good luck with the contest!
Comment Written by Jessica Borras on 25-Aug-2021
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Elvis Presley Ghost by Raul1

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This was a very interesting story, and easy to read. I'm not sure that it was especially scary for me lol but I get how zombie Elvis could be horror. If I could make one suggestion, the sentence "Pamela, instead of being frightened enjoyed all of Elvis Presley's song he has sung that night. Peter was in fumes with him." didn't flow as well as the rest. I'm not sure if it could use another comma, or if you could write Elvis instead of just "him"... But it was a fun story to read, anyhow. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written by Jessica Borras on 22-Aug-2021
Read and reviewed with blinders on.

Sweet as Sugar by June Sargent

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I love this poem, and how you've incorporated the titles of her own works into it. And the photo you chose works beautifully. Thank you so much for sharing!
Comment Written by Jessica Borras on 16-Aug-2021

Fight or Flight by Laurie Holding

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This was a fun story to read! A little sad to think that this is a "when the icecaps melt" situation, but still... I only have one suggestion... I believe it should be "breathe" instead of "breath" in the sentence "Grow food, walk and breath fresh air, maybe start a library with what was left----"... That is, if I'm reading it correctly.

Thank you for sharing, and good luck with the contest!
Comment Written by Jessica Borras on 16-Aug-2021

What's It All About? by Ideasaregems-Dawn

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This is a lovely poem you've written. I think you've summed up the feeling of doubt that many of us have had before. The rhymes flowed well. And the picture you chose works perfectly with the poem. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written by Jessica Borras on 16-Aug-2021


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