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Poetry by Nescher Pyscher

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itsnot ;-D

Hey Nescher, hope this finds u and your beautiful little family well and not at all crumbling tho u should b past those sleepless nights now. All the best to you and yours hope 2011 is sensational for u all xxxx

K
Comment Written by lerkun on 01-Jan-2011

The Death of Gods by Fireflyte

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Hello there Fireflyte, just having a sticky beak (as I do) ;-D
no beliefs beyond self gratification seems to be the norm these days doesn't it.. lottsa lip service with no good examples for the youths to follow.. my kids'll care ;-D
I have a few to send out but the eldest is already making me proud at just shy of seventeen and male.

b well and good luck in the comp

K
Comment Written by lerkun on 24-Oct-2009

Early Morning Wonder by adewpearl
Chapter 13 of the book The Ottava Rima

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ooh I spoilt myself reading the other one first.. specially with it's two stanzas, The sun cheers me and my bones up so I'm feelin' it.. impeccable rhyme and rhythm as always

b well

K
Comment Written by lerkun on 23-Oct-2009

A Trespasser's Lament by adewpearl
Chapter 8 of the book Twenty for Halloween

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Bugger, I got no sixer for you... what a fantastic opening
The denizens of midnight have conspired
to part my body from my mortal soul. brilliant Brooke
well that fool's path was not a good one was it ;-D
you just suck up inspiration everywhere don't you ;-D
big grins

b well

K
Comment Written by lerkun on 23-Oct-2009

Random Acts of Kindness by rama devi

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aint that the truth.. my impatience is often tempered by the thought that what I need will be there when the time comes. thankyou for sharing this piece of your life rd. much enjoyed


b well

lerk
Comment Written by lerkun on 22-Oct-2009

Cocoon by StevenJosephBruening

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Hello there steven, hope all is well.. I like the image you have used to write this septolet.. the only thing I'd suggest is avoiding repetition in these small works.. it's hard enough to disguise in larger works so becomes very obvious in smaller ones.. other than that.. good write..

b well and good luck


lerk
Comment Written by lerkun on 20-Oct-2009

On The Beach by CALLAHANMR

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hello there callahan, you've created a picture everyone will be able to envisage.. it flows very well and does not appear to be in 'form'... great write and good luck in the comp.


b well

lerk
Comment Written by lerkun on 20-Oct-2009

If Words by luisestable

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If words were things to throw
With the effet to people change, I`d throw to you the words, "Love me."
So you would come with open heart;
Your life with mine forever blend. < suggest only.. bind?

I like this although I thought of 'stalkers' and such which wouldn't achieve the desired effect ;-D

my thoughts...use or lose at your discretion

b well

lerk
Comment Written by lerkun on 20-Oct-2009

Diaphanous Dustings by Helvi2

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I really like the 'art' Helvi.. the poem has a hard task in meeting up with it as it's not nearly as expressive 'design aside' the poem beneath feels restricted to form.
my thoughts


b well

lerk
Comment Written by lerkun on 20-Oct-2009

The Brown- Eyed Lady by luisestable

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hello there, I am endeared by the color choice ;-D
'she modest seems' is grammatically incorrect.
the last two lines.. 'she makes a fact'???
and 'dear sex'???

I'm surprised really, your language use in conversation is fine.. are you 'trying' to make it sound like broken e'glish?

b well

lerk
Comment Written by lerkun on 20-Oct-2009


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