Dearest, little Lilly, great to see you back. Regardless of grammar and what I shoul dbe looking for, I was interested in the narrative, only because I feel I know where it is all going and as to the conclusion, but one thing...if there is a Lilly that is fine at the end or beginning of it all, Couldn't be more happier.
Good to see you are ok.
My best wishes,
Hi Ella, it's good to see you back. I read this with interest and I quite liked it. I hope you will expand on the story. At the moment it's very much up in the open. All the beast. Ulla:)))
Sweet, Jesus! Its so good having you back with us on FanStory, Ella. Last time I read your work was on June 7th, when you posted--"Pillow of Dreams." Your Non-Fiction Romance Presentation, ""Lily," a part of your book "My Life," is truly a most
commendable post. Of course, you're picture of July 2011--"Is commendable as well!" Did I say that? "You bet I did!"
While reading along, I was wondering? You wrote; "Lily is like any other woman. She is patient, kind and full uncomplicated energy." Shouldn't there be an "OF" in between "Full and Uncomplicated?" Also, "He would love to know more about her as so far he likes the way she lives her life." Shouldn't "SO FAR" be taken out? Then, "Deep cut added to the scars Lily carries from her marriage." Shouldn't "Cut read; Cuts?" Once again, "ADIL" responds right away, and then for the next three weeks, "ORION" and Lily exchange emails. Which is it--ADIL or ORION? And finally... "Orion lived his life to the limits he could take in a very respectful way." Did you mean; "He could TALK in a very respectful way?"
Of course, I'm not asking additional questions. However, I am recommending you using "Grammerly--etc.," to clarify your meaning. Oh, "I've been there--and still visit at times. If it wasn't for Grammerly, I would probably write; "Dem dar dogs--er gonna bite yo..."oh, you know?" I love "Lily!" Hope you are receptive of my remarks--"in a positive way." Once again--"it is good to have you back!" Best wishes--and God bless.
Dear Ella...It has been almost a year since I have been here steady so you may have forgotten our conversations about men. I love your story, but being with such a well- known man would be uncomfortable to me, always in the spotlight, never revered for myself. I speak only for me. Obviously, you have found a way to do it. Oh, but I get ahead of the story...
I shall wait, eagerly for the next chapter of Cinderella...no pun intended.:) Six stars for the tale of an exciting life.
Hi Ella, sooooo go to see you my sweet friend...missed you...I love your story told...but not sure I would trust this guy...but you never know...internet relationship can turn out to be the worst...let's see where this one goes sweet girl...very well written you...and this picture is priceless...love ou...Linda xxoo
HI Ella, sorry I don't have any sixes sweet girl...******...I love your poem...I love to dream of places like this...and often wish I could be stuck on an island with a true love...sigh...dreams...I love your poem...and love your picture...Love Linda xxoo
Hi Ella, this is beautiful words you've chosen here. So they just came to you? What a wonderful declaration of love. I loved it. All the best. Ulla:)))
Hey there, Ella! It's great to read your poetry again and have you share your words with us again. I hope all is well. Your poem is lovely and who wouldn't want to be rocked by the stars? The presentation is great, and music is from one of my all-time favorite movies.
Hi, little Ella. Good o see you here. I have not been too well so just easing back.
A lovely light write in which the heart speaks volumes of the person you are.
My best wishes.
You had me in your title, "Pillow of Dreams". Makes me want to crawl back in bed and get lost in my dreams.
I'm not a free verse gal, but I enjoyed your word choices, and the glimpse you give the reader without going overboard. You captured the dreamy quality in a satisfying way.
I'm looking at line 4 - "where happiness (breaths)" - I think it should be spelled breathes.
Thank you for showing me the way to my day dreams today :)