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Lily

Excellent

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Dearest, little Lilly, great to see you back. Regardless of grammar and what I shoul dbe looking for, I was interested in the narrative, only because I feel I know where it is all going and as to the conclusion, but one thing...if there is a Lilly that is fine at the end or beginning of it all, Couldn't be more happier.
Good to see you are ok.
My best wishes,
RG

Comment Written 03-Nov-2017 by RGstar

reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017

Thank you, sweet RG, for your kind words and lovely review. I miss you too, and yes, I am doing fine and great. Growing so much where I am right now, still, have to improve a lot. I have amazing people around me, and I inspire and encourage them as far as they inspire me. Not sure if this will be a whole book. I am writing a script, and much of this story will be there. Lily left for Europe...is she going to meet Adil again? Good question and I do know the answer....well, let's see. Stay well, my dear friend. Much love, Ella

Lily

Excellent

Hi Ella, it's good to see you back. I read this with interest and I quite liked it. I hope you will expand on the story. At the moment it's very much up in the open. All the beast. Ulla:)))

Comment Written 03-Nov-2017 by Ulla

reply by the author on 04-Nov-2017

Thank you so much, Ulla, for your great review. I miss reading your stories and life is very busy in my world. Love the man I have, and no, he is not Adil. Will try to catch up on some of my dear friends, including you. Please take care and don't forget to love yourself first. Many blessings, Ella

reply by Ulla on 04-Nov-2017

That would be great to see more of you. x

Lily

Excellent

Sweet, Jesus! Its so good having you back with us on FanStory, Ella. Last time I read your work was on June 7th, when you posted--"Pillow of Dreams." Your Non-Fiction Romance Presentation, ""Lily," a part of your book "My Life," is truly a most
commendable post. Of course, you're picture of July 2011--"Is commendable as well!" Did I say that? "You bet I did!"

While reading along, I was wondering? You wrote; "Lily is like any other woman. She is patient, kind and full uncomplicated energy." Shouldn't there be an "OF" in between "Full and Uncomplicated?" Also, "He would love to know more about her as so far he likes the way she lives her life." Shouldn't "SO FAR" be taken out? Then, "Deep cut added to the scars Lily carries from her marriage." Shouldn't "Cut read; Cuts?" Once again, "ADIL" responds right away, and then for the next three weeks, "ORION" and Lily exchange emails. Which is it--ADIL or ORION? And finally... "Orion lived his life to the limits he could take in a very respectful way." Did you mean; "He could TALK in a very respectful way?"

Of course, I'm not asking additional questions. However, I am recommending you using "Grammerly--etc.," to clarify your meaning. Oh, "I've been there--and still visit at times. If it wasn't for Grammerly, I would probably write; "Dem dar dogs--er gonna bite yo..."oh, you know?" I love "Lily!" Hope you are receptive of my remarks--"in a positive way." Once again--"it is good to have you back!" Best wishes--and God bless.

Respectfully,
Bill (Junglefighter)

Comment Written 03-Nov-2017 by Commando

reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017

Thank you, Bill, for your kind words and an excellent review. Am I back? well, not really. I might post another part sometimes but that?s what it is right now. Thank you for pointing out mistakes. Life is busy, I decided to change the name from Orion to Adil.... I guess something distracted me and I didn?t follow till the end plus few other things. For the ?cut? it?s just one cut, not many cuts. Stay well and blessed, my friend 😊

reply by Commando on 03-Nov-2017

Please! Stay with us, beautiful. Why haven't you responded to my email? I told you, "I'm here for you!" You stay well too--my friend. As for blessed, "You are as an Angel!" I miss you...
Bill

Lily

Exceptional

This work has reached the exceptional level

Dear Ella...It has been almost a year since I have been here steady so you may have forgotten our conversations about men. I love your story, but being with such a well- known man would be uncomfortable to me, always in the spotlight, never revered for myself. I speak only for me. Obviously, you have found a way to do it. Oh, but I get ahead of the story...
I shall wait, eagerly for the next chapter of Cinderella...no pun intended.:) Six stars for the tale of an exciting life.

Comment Written 03-Nov-2017 by Nika2016

reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017

Hello darling....I have not forgotten our conversations. The story happened a long time ago, and because one of the writers here asked me about the poem "Wind of Love", I decided to add more in the story of a story. I am happy with a man I have in my life, and we are both in the spotlight. Thank you so much for your exceptional review, sweet love.

Lily

Excellent

Hi Ella, sooooo go to see you my sweet friend...missed you...I love your story told...but not sure I would trust this guy...but you never know...internet relationship can turn out to be the worst...let's see where this one goes sweet girl...very well written you...and this picture is priceless...love ou...Linda xxoo

Comment Written 02-Nov-2017 by l.raven

reply by the author on 03-Nov-2017

Hello, sweetheart. It is a story that happened a very long time ago...I decided to write it after one of the writers here asked me about the poem I shared called "The wind of love". Life is incredibly busy, I created many beautiful pieces, travel a lot, and I am happy with the man I have in my life... Thank you so much for your wonderful review. Miss you lots, darling.

reply by l.raven on 03-Nov-2017

miss you lots too...I am so glad things are going so good...smiling soooo big....and you sweet girl are always soooo welcome...love you lots too...xxoo

Pillow of Dreams

Excellent

HI Ella, sorry I don't have any sixes sweet girl...******...I love your poem...I love to dream of places like this...and often wish I could be stuck on an island with a true love...sigh...dreams...I love your poem...and love your picture...Love Linda xxoo

Comment Written 09-Jun-2017 by l.raven

Pillow of Dreams

Excellent

Hi Ella, this is beautiful words you've chosen here. So they just came to you? What a wonderful declaration of love. I loved it. All the best. Ulla:)))

Comment Written 09-Jun-2017 by Ulla

Pillow of Dreams

Excellent

Hey there, Ella! It's great to read your poetry again and have you share your words with us again. I hope all is well. Your poem is lovely and who wouldn't want to be rocked by the stars? The presentation is great, and music is from one of my all-time favorite movies.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment Written 09-Jun-2017 by IndianaIrish

Pillow of Dreams

Excellent

Hi, little Ella. Good o see you here. I have not been too well so just easing back.

A lovely light write in which the heart speaks volumes of the person you are.
Bravo.
My best wishes.
RG

Comment Written 07-Jun-2017 by RGstar

Pillow of Dreams

Excellent

Hi Ella,

You had me in your title, "Pillow of Dreams". Makes me want to crawl back in bed and get lost in my dreams.

I'm not a free verse gal, but I enjoyed your word choices, and the glimpse you give the reader without going overboard. You captured the dreamy quality in a satisfying way.

I'm looking at line 4 - "where happiness (breaths)" - I think it should be spelled breathes.

Thank you for showing me the way to my day dreams today :)

Comment Written 07-Jun-2017 by Joy Graham

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