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 I had forgotten how much I used to like using "nifty" to describe almost everything I liked, especially certain foods and of course all those 50s vintage cars. But your rhythm falters too much in the last stanza. Can you tweak those verses before the voting starts?
Comment Written 27-Aug-2017 by RodG
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
    Thanks for the heads-up. I'll look again.

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 what a nifty post and nifty poem! I love Nifty - and say it often. Now will say it more often so it won't go the way of "double decker" (meaning bunk beds.) I was talking to a Texas friend (I'm originally from Georgia) and was telling her that a room had a double decker in it and she had no idea what I was talking about.
So... nifty it is. I hope you get lots of positive responses.
Nifty responses!
Pome Lover


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Comment Written 27-Aug-2017 by pome lover
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
    Thank you for your enthusiasm for the word, nifty. We'll have to start a nifty club.
reply by pome lover on 27-Aug-2017
    nifty idea.

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 Three mono rhyming quatrains on the subject of the word nifty, apparently an endangered species. Now why is that I wonder. Could it be used in incantations for magic spells as a aphrodisiac, like rhino horn perhaps?

Words lapsing into obsolescence do not do so as a result of people wanting to use them but because people don't want to use them they are like the "poor fool that struts and frets his hour upon the stage and then is heard no more".

To hell with "nifty", what about "shibboleth"? I mean well, I couldn't even spell it right first time.


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Comment Written 27-Aug-2017 by Pantygynt
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    Thank you for your observations but I still like nifty.

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 Yes my friend you have painted a beautiful picture full of imagery and the picture chosen works very well good luck in the contest regards Jill
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017 by Mrs Happy Poet Reviewed with blinders on.
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    Thank you for your very positive comments.

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 You did a wonderful job with this challenge. The flow was very nice. The theme was good. Very enchanted atmosphere, non-judgmental and thought provoking. Full of vivid images. The artwork complemented your poem.

There was no SPAG, no typos, no room for improvement.

I look forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017 by Oatmeal Reviewed with blinders on.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
    Thank you for such a thorough and complimentary review.

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 Better fire in the sky than spreading like wildfire (please excuse the pun) on the ground.
Of course, there was once a science fiction movie titled 'Fire in the Sky' about aliens who abduct a lumberjack from an Oregon logging crew, subject every orifice in his body to probing and tests, then release him.
I think he would have much preferred fire on the ground instead.
By my count (and most likely yours too), I counted 17 syllables used to compose this haiku. That's within the limits stipulated by the form.
Nicely presented.
Best of luck!
~Dean
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017 by Dean Kuch Reviewed with blinders on.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2017
    Thank you, your reviews always bring me a smile.

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 Well, wow. This is ANOTHER great entry. This is going to be quite a challenging contest. Beautiful picture, love your haiku!! Blessings...
Comment Written 07-Jul-2017 by Irish Rain Reviewed with blinders on.
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    Thank you, your praise means a lot to me since I respect you as a writer.
reply by Irish Rain on 07-Jul-2017
    Wow, thank YOU!!

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 This is a fine entry for the haiku contest on fire
Exact syllables to the 5-7-5 form of haiku
and excellent imagery of the tree silhouettes/sunset
The three lines appear to be connected,
but I don't know if that is a problem
as almost anything goes in haiku on FS
A solid satori third line works well
Good luck in the contest
RS
Comment Written 07-Jul-2017 by rspoet Reviewed with blinders on.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
    Thank you for your detailed analysis and positive comments.

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 nice poem like you use of silhouettes of trees that lovely wording for the start of the poem. good luck for the contest and thanks for sharing you work Sharon
Comment Written 07-Jul-2017 by sharonlshelley Reviewed with blinders on.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
    Thank you very much for your good comments and good wishes.

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 A very well-written haiku. A red firy sunset color the sky, the background for silhouetted trees. A beautiful colorful scene to remember and enjoy. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2017 by Sandra du Plessis Reviewed with blinders on.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
    Thank you for your very positive comments.

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