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Excellent I had forgotten how much I used to like using "nifty" to describe almost everything I liked, especially certain foods and of course all those 50s vintage cars. But your rhythm falters too much in the last stanza. Can you tweak those verses before the voting starts?
Excellent what a nifty post and nifty poem! I love Nifty - and say it often. Now will say it more often so it won't go the way of "double decker" (meaning bunk beds.) I was talking to a Texas friend (I'm originally from Georgia) and was telling her that a room had a double decker in it and she had no idea what I was talking about. So... nifty it is. I hope you get lots of positive responses. Nifty responses! Pome Lover This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Excellent Three mono rhyming quatrains on the subject of the word nifty, apparently an endangered species. Now why is that I wonder. Could it be used in incantations for magic spells as a aphrodisiac, like rhino horn perhaps? Words lapsing into obsolescence do not do so as a result of people wanting to use them but because people don't want to use them they are like the "poor fool that struts and frets his hour upon the stage and then is heard no more". To hell with "nifty", what about "shibboleth"? I mean well, I couldn't even spell it right first time. This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Excellent Yes my friend you have painted a beautiful picture full of imagery and the picture chosen works very well good luck in the contest regards Jill
Excellent You did a wonderful job with this challenge. The flow was very nice. The theme was good. Very enchanted atmosphere, non-judgmental and thought provoking. Full of vivid images. The artwork complemented your poem. There was no SPAG, no typos, no room for improvement. I look forward to seeing you again. Love you, Oatmeal
Excellent Better fire in the sky than spreading like wildfire (please excuse the pun) on the ground. Of course, there was once a science fiction movie titled 'Fire in the Sky' about aliens who abduct a lumberjack from an Oregon logging crew, subject every orifice in his body to probing and tests, then release him. I think he would have much preferred fire on the ground instead. By my count (and most likely yours too), I counted 17 syllables used to compose this haiku. That's within the limits stipulated by the form. Nicely presented. Best of luck! ~Dean
Excellent Well, wow. This is ANOTHER great entry. This is going to be quite a challenging contest. Beautiful picture, love your haiku!! Blessings...
Excellent This is a fine entry for the haiku contest on fire Exact syllables to the 5-7-5 form of haiku and excellent imagery of the tree silhouettes/sunset The three lines appear to be connected, but I don't know if that is a problem as almost anything goes in haiku on FS A solid satori third line works well Good luck in the contest RS
Excellent nice poem like you use of silhouettes of trees that lovely wording for the start of the poem. good luck for the contest and thanks for sharing you work Sharon
Excellent A very well-written haiku. A red firy sunset color the sky, the background for silhouetted trees. A beautiful colorful scene to remember and enjoy. Good luck with the contest.