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A 4 Line Free Verse Poem; Please Read Author Notes
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Writing is such a good way to express love regrets, getting left, lied to or just ignored. Spit out your anger and your grief - there always seems one person is more in love than the other. I know it rips, when someone blows you off. It also helps to write it down and wait to be pursued. I related to this, because I have just left a friendship that I thought was solid.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018 by Flyaway1


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Certainly a poignant write about being the half the gas much more invested in the relationship than the other...Great job in this free verse format! ;) I would only suggest, perhaps, for the sake of greater impact, you consider removing the contraction in the last line and use both words: you have. Great format in your presentation....the visual adds to your emotional conveyance!:) ;)
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018 by Y. M. Roger


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Oh yes, our choices and actions speak so much louder than our words. I am wondering what the muse was for this poem. I appreciate you sharing this poem with us. I enjoyed reading. Thank you.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2018 by barbara.wilkey


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Except for the guilt and demons you are living with. Great work,keeps you in suspense throughout. Except, when will hell break lose?
Comment Written 12-May-2018 by Bobby Jo


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Yes, time.

Although I'm a prose person and pretty poor in writing poetry, I love reading poems like this, poems that have some meaningfor me and give me something to take away with me. So it's nota wonder that I would read an excellent poem like yours.

Thanks you for sharing.


Comment Written 12-May-2018 by apky


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Very well said and oh how true because things in life are hardly ever, ever the way they are portrayed to be. And to me its just the game we play with one another. It makes me think of the song "Mascarade"
Comment Written 12-May-2018 by Mary Hollingsworth


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Life is not what it should be when we find ourselves on the outside, looking in. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 12-May-2018 by c_lucas


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Free verse can often be most effective when it is short on fact and long on emotion. I feel melamcholy, confusion, a smidge of betrayal...a recipe for missing what was or, minimally, what could have been ....

Karenina
Comment Written 12-May-2018 by karenina


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Food for thought here and an unusual free form for your poem. I liked the line: 'Snow daffodils dancing int he frigid breeze, that reminded me of spring, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-May-2018 by Dolly'sPoems


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This is intense passion and desire that consumes and penetrates deep into your, love that is wild, real and wonderful, hope it lasts a lifetime, a very expressive write, good luck with it, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018 by Dolly'sPoems


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