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Am I Wrong

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This sounds like the speaker stayed much too long in a bad marriage. It is never wrong to want to be loved and needed. It is only human to want love returned if it is given, especially in a marriage. Their is never love with out some anger and tears. But ones that can be forgiven and then love returns.

The repetition and line breaks increase the emotion of the poem.

Keep writing

Joan
Comment Written 24-Aug-2017 by dragonpoet


Empty Carts

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Nice ,I can relate to this as others can also.
I use to struggle alot, even when everything
is well around me ,it's called depression .
I take nothing for it but I fill my cart with
my new love of writing my thoughts down
and sharing my stories.
Love yourself and be open to be loved
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017 by 914


Are We

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Are we I doubt it .
Clever wording that says it all in very few words. Love the art work it's so cute and vivid and compliments the content of your work.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2017 by Emily George


Fly Sweetheart Fly

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Hi haven't heard much so I'm seeking you out Fox.
Are you okay?
I'm not
Two recent surgeries for a hernia.
Wanted to die.
The pain.
It's in NY work here.
Making men cry.
My dedicated song for Jay is in the welcoming page fourth spot.
It will be first later after a few more reviews.
Stay well you and me exist but live in Hell.
Ricky....
Comment Written 01-Jun-2017 by Ricky1024


We Are the People

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This is a repeating theme I have in my poetry too. You express yourself well int these lines. but the last line seems long. Maybe in could be
'Isn't it our right to evict the bullies because of their stupid fights'.


Keep writing

Joan


Comment Written 30-May-2017 by dragonpoet


Taters and Gators

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Does mama always keep alligator killing weapons by the fire. Well at least you had meet with the potatoes. I like the 'ch' alliteration.

Keep writing

Joan
Comment Written 09-May-2017 by dragonpoet


Still Reaching

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Very philosophical and true two lines. It seems to be an essence type poem. It could be easily change into an antonym poem

Darkness
on must travel through
it to reach the
light.

Interesting art work.

Keep writing.

Joan
Comment Written 30-Apr-2017 by dragonpoet


Free Us

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This acrostic uses is few words to define freedom and why the Constitution uses it.

Hope you did well in the contest

Keep writing.

dragonpoet
Comment Written 11-Apr-2017 by dragonpoet


Mankind Needs It

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Yes we do need to pray for the President and his cabinet so we our leaders look like a comedy show to the world. Both our allies and our enemies. He seems to be showing us he's somewhat of a bigot, in the way he talks.

Keep writing

Joan
Comment Written 29-Mar-2017 by dragonpoet


Empty Carts

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Everyone wants to be loved for who they are and maybe you they aren't. I think posting poems and prose helps us find that acceptance and love. Sometimes there are rough and lonely times. These will pass and you will find what you need to fill the cart.

I found a couple errors. In live four 'that' should be what and in line eleven 'wonder' should be wander.

Keep writing

dragonpoet
Comment Written 17-Mar-2017 by dragonpoet


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