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You can claim the saving of my life my dear friend. I could relate to what you went through and most were so similar go things I experienced. Thank you so much for sharing this with us. It helped me to know I was not the only one experiencing such and thus allowed me to let go. Hugs to you.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2016 by foxangie123


Chapter 42

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Sharing your life with someone is not always the easiest thing to do . It takes commitment but it does reward a lot. Your story is typical of someone who has loved and lost love and loved again only to end with love memories which can be from encouraging or heartbreaking. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2016 by hdphifer


Chapter 41

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Hi, Edieas

= I can certainly understand where you're coming from with your fibromyalgia, as my symptoms started in 1997. Finally side-lined me from work in 2004.
= I was blessed with fantastic doctors, who put me on disability, since I could no longer function. My boss kept making me go home when I tired to work. Even tried telecommuting. Such a misunderstood illness.
= This chapter was interesting, and informative read.

(*<*) A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-Down (*>*)
Cheers & Blessings ... Jacqueline ~ Jackie ~ Jax
Comment Written 12-Jun-2016 by Jacqueline M Franklin


Chapter 38

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This is a very strong and charismatic story. I love your humor. Your self determination is admirable and inspiring.

I have a few suggestions to increase readability. First, too many of your paragraphs begin with "I". A few suggestions are noted.
1. Determined to keep this job regardless..., instead of "I was determined..."
2. The lady preparing to quit was training me..., instead of "I was being trained by the lady who was about to quit..."
3. A handwritten journal was filled with all of my problems, instead of "I wrote down in a journal all of my problems.."

Second, each person who speaks gets their own paragraph, per an English Professor of mine.

Third, one statement puzzled me. "The exterior I had seen in him..." You are speaking about his exterior, yet referring to his interior.
Overall Great story!


Comment Written 11-Jun-2016 by hummingbirdhill


Chapter 38

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Oh the struggles in life.I enjoyed reading your work, It just go to prove no matter what we have to go through we will survive.(Thank God).May I suggest in the line you wrote of "having (a) stability in my life"drop the letter a. God Bless
Comment Written 11-Jun-2016 by s.m.kirby


Chapter 40

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Your chapter was easy to read. I think I have would have enjoyed it more, if I had read the previous chapters. It sounds like a tricky situation with the conflict and problems of the characters in the book. I like the brief style of writing. :-)
Comment Written 11-Jun-2016 by lalique


Chapter 40

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This is a very good read and if it is true I am so sorry for what you have been through. I work for a shelter and now how hard it is to continue in a relationship if you feel it is for the kids benefit. I look forward to reading more of your story. Good job.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2016 by AnnieDawn


Chapter 39

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Usually when given time things will work out. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016 by c_lucas


Chapter 38

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You need to break up the early part of your post to make it easier for the reader. This is well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016 by c_lucas


Chapter 36

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I was truly enjoying the story of how you were doing and the last couple of lines were a bit saddening to me. I was hoping you could truly find happiness. Patricia
Comment Written 09-Jun-2016 by patcelaw


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