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A Figure

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It is not apparent whether Robert is a new flash character or one you've been keeping in your pocket for a quickly, but you managed to bring him to life in 100 words. No easy feat. Kudos to you.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020 by zeezeewriter


A Figure

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Hello Lance
I am not too sure why you have entered this as a 'family script'? My mistake if I have misunderstood you.
There's a good backstory here with just a few deft strokes. Very difficult in such a cramped space I am sure.
I wish you well with this.
cheers
phill
"...was money, to buy more..." (I am not sure a comma is needed - and if it is, perhaps it should be a semi-colon)
"...family set on..." (a comma after family) (unless it is meant to be family-set)
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020 by phill doran


Confessions of a Pollster

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You write with such vivid detail that the reader can easily feel that they are sitting with you observing what is happening. This account indicates that you either did frenetic notetaking or have a photographic memory. There's an air of a private eye at work here. There is a cadence which matches that era. Well written.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2019 by Liz O'Neill


Voting: A Report from Ground Zero

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It is very clear that where I vote, most are Republican. I'm sure they suspect that I'm a Democrat. They may even suspect, rumored or know that I am gay. Most gays are certainly not Republican, with all of the homophobia which has been resuscitated. You have brought an all too frequent scenario to the light, the mother & daughter split of ideologies. It is so hopeful to see the younger generation stand up for everyone's rights. This will surely invite the readers to agree or to protest to what truths you've exposed. Well written.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019 by Liz O'Neill


The Quiet Evolution of Dictatorship

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Just as you had a difficult time writing this, I had a difficult time reading. It is so tragically true. Research is showing Hitler lived on and planned another power time. Sadly, there will be many non-believers here. Many of his followers are drinking the kool-ade and thus have dulled senses. Thank you for writing this.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018 by Liz O'Neill


The Quiet Evolution of Dictatorship

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>>But he is a similar style of wannabe dictator, of need-to-be overlord or King, who believes that his own ideas are the only ones worthwhile; He is the only one who matters.<< ~ I certainly believe in this and have made it a constant issue in my recent writings.

As always, an excellent and insightful look at our times and politics.


I love my nation and an(I'm) troubled deeply with the fact that I see it crumbling.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018 by apky


The Quiet Evolution of Dictatorship

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I rate this a 5 star because this writer was not afraid to share his opinons. I could not see anything that I could disagree on. I'm anxious to see the rebuttals.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018 by Frank De layna


The Quiet Evolution of Dictatorship

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Your fear is right and understandable .Every thinking person should go through this introspection.
Rise of dictatorship seems to be an inevitable future.
Anti immigrant feelings are rampant but again one can only think of this as natural consequence. When every Tom Dick And harry wants to go to US and Later become their citizens (In India this is the average middle class dream) theire is a natural fear among the original occupants.
I dont know what is right and what is wrong any more.Thank you for your thought provoking write.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018 by Sanku


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You have certainly put your thoughts out loud and clear here, Lance, and as you know, I'm English, so can't really say too much about the American politics. But, saying that, I do think you are right. We have been watching your country, as have the rest of the world, and it does seem to be destroying itself. Ours isn't much better as you probably know, what with this thing about Brexit. Interesting piece. Well done. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 10-Nov-2018 by sandramitchell


The Quiet Evolution of Dictatorship

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Hi there, This is a poignant and sobering essay, and I'm afraid that I agree with you. History is repeating itself as it always seems to do. Man can apparently not learn to live in peace and with love. Well, you as a nation voted in Trump and now not only you but the world has to endure him. He is a dangerous person and as many dangerous persons before him, he has his followers. God preserve us all. And I'm not even religious. Just a saying.
Now I try to avoid writing straight editorials here, = Now, I try to avoid writing straight editorials here,
I love my nation and an troubled deeply with = I love my nation and I'm/am troubled deeply with
Is it fair to state comparing Donald Trump to Adolf Hitler? = Is it fair to compare Donald Trump to Adolf Hitler?
It effects profits.= it affects profits
A very well written and thought through essay. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 09-Nov-2018 by Ulla


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