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HAWordsmith
http://www.fanstory.com/hawordsmith
Location: Colorado Springs, CO
Gender: Female
Born: Los Angeles
Member: Standard
Joined: December 2009
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Poetry is my way of getting everything out of my head. Sometimes it's funny, sometimes it's deep, and sometimes it just really stinks; but any way it comes out, I appreciate you letting me share my thoughts here, with you.
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You write with ease to show your breeding, but easy writing's curst hard reading. Richard Brinsley Sheridan (1751 - 1816)
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HAWordsmith: WTF is it with people that always have to be friggin' right! "I looked it up, and it is, so I'm gonna leave it the way I have it." Oh ok, DA, you do that. You might want to look up common sense next time you are looking sh**t up too. Cause something here tells me you don't have any! If X is not the tallest thing, and Y is, then X cannot be taller than Y. It's really simple! ***Shiny***
September 10, 2011 at 7:03PM
    sasil: Having a laugh-riot reading your profile page here--great anagrams. Once read a bookseries where one of the main characters' name was an anagram ("A man and a woman"--can't remeber the actual name though, sorry). Thanks for your recent review. Now that I know where you're coming from in style/manner of review, I have a deeper appreciation of your comments. Take care--S.
    September 11, 2011 at 10:19AM
    HAWordsmith: I'm glad you are enjoying, Sasil, as I really enjoyed reading your piece "how Does Your Garden Grow". It was very nice. I look forward to reading more. :)
    September 11, 2011 at 11:36PM
    Bicpen: Tell it like it is...HA.
    September 12, 2011 at 7:16AM
    HAWordsmith: LMAO Bic ... Thanks :)
    September 12, 2011 at 8:34AM
    Bicpen: HA...excuse my ignorance but just what is LMAO...kinda new to all this stuff.
    September 12, 2011 at 1:35PM
    HAWordsmith: Ooh sorry... it means laughing my ass off :)
    September 15, 2011 at 1:40AM
    Jean Lutz: It has been a long day, but I do not want it to end without thanking you for all you have done for our country. I watched the laying of the wreath in Arlington and remembered when I lived across the street at Ft. Myer (South) in Arlington. Seems like it was several lifetimes ago. I miss your posts and hope you will be back soon.
    November 11, 2011 at 10:06PM
    cvcopac: Just stopped by to say, Hi!
    June 19, 2013 at 3:24PM

HAWordsmith: You know your muse has left you for the evening when you are scrolling the buttons at the top of this page and zoning out on the blue waves...
September 7, 2011 at 6:34AM

HAWordsmith: My reviews: please take them with cum grano salis (a grain of salt).

1. My words to you are not the end all of end all, and truly matter little in the grand scheme of things.

2. I will tell you, honestly and openly, how your work affects ME, what changes can be made to more affect ME, SPAG errors, inconsistencies, incongruities, etc.

3. Please remember that I am but one reader with different tastes, life experiences, thoughts, opinions, etc.

4. You cannot argue with me to change my mind. (You can explain something to me that I may not understand, but that is not going to guarantee a change in your rating.)

5. If I think the writing is trite or fodder for greeting cards, again this is simply my opinion. If you do not believe so, please see #4, then #1 above. (Simply ignore my opinion and move on)

6. I am not going to downgrade you for concepts I do not get. If all the elements of a good poem are there, I can still appreciate the construction and flow of the language without grasping the concept.

7. I will not downgrade for SPAG errors unless they are so overwhelming as to affect the reading experience. Otherwise I will simply point them out.

8. My reviews are not a personal attack. I do not know you, therefor cannot be. I am commenting on that which I read and how it presents to ME.

9. Above all, remember #1.

No matter what your writing style, whether or not I think it is good or bad, I appreciate that you are here learning with me; and taking that brave step into the world of writing.
August 29, 2011 at 10:31AM
    redrider6612: Members aren't allowed to argue or respond negatively to reviews. The site cannot possibly monitor all replies, so it is up to the reviewer to report them!
    August 29, 2011 at 1:31PM
    nor84: Hi, HA. Love your attitude! And, as Red said, if somebody attacks you personally, as in being very nasty and defensive about their writing, REPORT them. You're tough, and I'm tough, but there are people on Fanstory who can be hurt by such attacks. We are all here to learn and perhaps to share a good story or poem. If the reader doesn't think it's good, that's fine with most of us.
    August 29, 2011 at 3:07PM

HAWordsmith: Since this site is about words, I thought I would share with you one of my favorite things...anagrams. Below are some of the most clever anagrams that I have come across, to date. Enjoy!

DORMITORY = DIRTY ROOM
PRESBYTERIAN = BEST IN PRAYER
ASTRONOMER = MOON STARER
DESPERATION = A ROPE ENDS IT
THE EYES = THEY SEE
GEORGE BUSH = HE BUGS GORE
MORSE CODE = HERE COME DOTS
SLOT MACHINES = CASH LOST IN ME
ANIMOSITY = IS NO AMITY
ELECTION RESULTS = LIES! LET'S RECOUNT
MOTHER IN-LAW = WOMAN HITLER
SNOOZE ALARMS = ALAS! NO MORE Z'S
DECIMAL POINT = I'M A DOT IN PLACE
THE EARTHQUAKES = THAT QUEER SHAKE
ELEVEN PLUS TWO = TWELVE PLUS ONE
PRESIDENT CLINTON OF THE USA = TO COPULATE, HE FINDS INTERNS
February 9, 2010 at 1:33AM
    another jim: Wow! Almost makes me feel like there's some cosmic presence at work here...LOL! These were terrific, HAW. Thanks for sharing!
    February 9, 2010 at 8:21AM
    shelley kaye: hahaha i love those! :)
    February 9, 2010 at 11:53AM
    amel: MOTHER IN -LAW= WOMAN HITLER...LOL it reminds me of mine..hehe....clever writing...thanks for sharing, HAW
    February 24, 2010 at 4:05PM
    closetpoetjester: Now I know why you call yourself a wordsmith. Very apt and very clever
    March 16, 2010 at 1:22PM
    closetpoetjester: Now I know why you call yourself a wordsmith. Very apt and very clever
    March 16, 2010 at 1:22PM
    Martin Sloan: Immensely clever, great fun. Laughing and wowing at the same time
    March 21, 2010 at 2:09PM

HAWordsmith: FLIPPIN' ANGRY...

In my journey to learn of the poetic word and mind, I have found that poems are usually written with a specific audience in mind. If you read and immediately understand, then you were its 'intended' audience. But that does not mean that you have to be the intended. Only that, if you truly want to enjoy the word, the imagery, possibly the message, or the game of mind, you must be, at least in some small way, willing to do what it takes to become the intended... to research, to ask, to step into another's shoes... I can only hope that you are not an obsessive compulsive about wearing another's shoes because poetry can definitely delve into dirty minds!

LMAO (yeah... I came across a poet that wrote about some very "dicey" things). I was fascinated though as I stepped into his shoes, and took a walk. Poetry is about seeing things through others' eyes, and if it is really good, you will feel it.

I have said before, that I have only just begun writing poetry. I now believe, with the little that I have learned thus far, that it has always been a part of my life. That somehow, my mother had taught me to live in it. A poetic life... always able to slip easily into others' shoes... and I will forever remember the day that changed me. That, however, is another poem, another day.


A Song for Simeon, by T.S.Eliot


"Lord, the Roman hyacinths are blooming in bowl

and

The winter sun creeps by the snow hills;

The stubborn season has made stand.

My life is light, waiting for the death wind,

Like a feather on the back of my hand.

Dust in sunlight and memory in corners

Wait for the wind that chills towards the dead land."


The assumptions of the poetic mind here being:

1) that I am going to know who Simeon is, or that I will be willing to find out.
2) that I am an experienced reader, or that I am willing to obtain what it takes to read it.
3) that I will, as the intended, understand the allusions, or will investigate them.
a. such as: Why is it important, to the author, that the hyacinths are Roman?
b. Why are they in a bowl?

(The beauty of the words lay in the juxtaposition of dust and memories, old age and Winter, death coming on a wind, etc., and they come to life when I understand)

4) that whoever is reading, will recognize it as poetry and understand that not all is as it seems.
5) that the reader will see the stanzas and appreciate the creation thereof.
6) that they will notice that every line rhymes, or that every other one does, or that maybe none at all, or somewhere in the middle of...
7) but the biggest assumption of the poet, the broadest desire, the hope, is that the reader will feel, engaging not only their mind, but their emotions and imagination.

Just as the above poem conjures an image of my friend "i". An old man (though I do not believe so, but he does), tired of life (and not in the sense of life itself, he loves life), but still hanging on, waiting... waiting for some crucial event, some validation, something magnificent to happen.

I am glad that my journey in life has brought me to this place. I am glad to see things through a poets eyes... the perspective is much deeper, the colors more vivid, the emotions more vital, and life is so much larger now.

This is what brings me to a review I received for my poem "A Summer's Fall". The review is included below. Based upon what I have written above, I am sure you will understand why I consider this review the antithesis of everything poetry is, everything this site is about, and will no more than have considered it here (review below):

"Poetry is in the ear of the beholder. (Just like beauty) You will probably get some 5/s for this poem. It has several attributes I like in a poem; namely rhyming, flow, structure, and ending. I give you one demerit on the meter. Meter is a subjective matter I admit. If I were to rewrite (edit) your poem (which I have not been so requested) I would do it thusly. (How's that for an oxymoron.)

Roots deep in soil, far under ground
In a wild garden, untouched and unfound
Growing soft mossy like sacred prayer beads
Snapdragons with honey and sweet summer meads

As blue bells ring out the summer's last dirge
The cattails give warning, fall's on the verge
The Crocus wails loudly in a futile attempt
As birds sweep the garden, a garden unkept

The autumn arrives with its diminishing light
Flowers bow their heads paying homage this night
Summer is gone with a strong fall wind
A wind from which, the winter will rescind

What I did, essentially, was just to redact syllables to make the flow smoother."

PS If you would like to see a copy of my reply to this person, feel free to ask.
February 1, 2010 at 3:47AM
    John_Carrick: am I getting this right? Someone rewrote your poem? Damn - that's downright arrogant
    February 1, 2010 at 4:13AM
    John_Carrick: That's not just arrogant - it's wrong. I read that one - it was frikkin' brilliant and had much more, je ne sais quoi. It, (yours) had heart and love. That above sounds cold and pompus, dare I say condescending. Line breaks and capitalization are everything. Yours was intimate - this is frigid. yours was full of hope - this one reads like death
    February 1, 2010 at 4:18AM
    another jim: Interesting post! And yeah, what's with that Picasso guy? Doesn't he know that people's faces have TWO eyes in front? And while we're at it, I think Mona Lisa would have looked better as a blonde. And what's up with Shakespeare? He should know that nobody says "doth" anymore! Sheesh...
    February 1, 2010 at 7:06AM
    adewpearl: There is NOTHING that grates on me more than having someone rewrite a poem for me. Besides, as John says, they often make the work far WORSE in doing so, it is simply something they have no damned right to do. If another poet wants to do a better job writing on some theme than he thinks I have done, fantastic, compose a new poem and post it! You have every right, my dear, to be flippin' angry.
    February 1, 2010 at 1:43PM
    stormwolf2:

    Just dropping by to say hi, and thank you for the warm congratulations. I appreciate it. Your page is very interesting, especially about the moron who thought he could rewrite your work. I would love to see your reply to this review. You are an excellent poet and a breath of fresh air here on FS.

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    February 24, 2010 at 12:46AM
    Spitfire: You are not only beautiful, but gutsy. So glad to hear you spout off about things that bother me. Some writers are plain terrible, but we can't say that. I did get Tom to put stars as average instead of below average. Have to give people credit for trying. My writing group of which I'm president thinks every piece in tops. Then I go to work on it--verbalizing the positives first- not always easy. I feel like a female Simon Cowell,
    August 27, 2011 at 11:28PM
    HAWordsmith: LOL Spitfire, I do too! It's crazy that we let it get to us.
    August 29, 2011 at 10:08AM

HAWordsmith: My reviews: please take with cum grano salis (a grain of salt).

1. My words to you are not the end all of end all, and truly matter little in the grand scheme of things.

2. I will tell you, honestly and openly, how your work affects ME, what changes can be made to more affect ME, SPAG errors, inconsistencies, incongruities, etc.

3. Please remember that I am but one reader with different tastes, life experiences, thoughts, opinions, etc.

4. You cannot argue with me to change my mind. (You can explain something to me that I may not understand, but that is not going to guarantee a change in your rating.)

5. If I think the writing is trite or fodder for greeting cards, again this is simply my opinion. If you do not believe so, please see #4 above. (simply ignore my opinion and move on)

6. I am not going to downgrade you for concepts I do not get. If all the elements of a good poem are there, I can still appreciate the construction and flow of the language without grasping the concept.

7. I will not downgrade for SPAG errors unless they are so overwhelming as to affect the reading experience. Otherwise I will simply point them out.

8. My reviews are not a personal attack. I do not know you, therefor cannot be. I am commenting on that which I read and how it presents to ME.

9. Above all, remember #1.

No matter what your writing style, whether or not I think it is good or bad, I appreciate that you are here learning with me; and taking that brave step into the world of writing.
January 16, 2010 at 3:20PM
    another jim: Nicely put, HAWordsmith, especially your closing paragraph. Look forward to your stumbling across my postings some day, and applying all nine of your sensible precepts!
    January 16, 2010 at 4:17PM
    HAWordsmith: Thank you Jim.
    January 16, 2010 at 11:20PM
    bnd-writenow: I love this. LOL - Perhaps you should make it a petition, and we can sign it.
    January 19, 2010 at 3:14PM
    HAWordsmith: Thank you bnd...I always appreciate your thoughts. You are more than welcome to do so, if you like...as for me, it is enough to have it here. LOL
    January 20, 2010 at 1:46AM
    Martin Sloan: This is very encouraging, and should make anyone who is a bit afraid of postin work more likely to do so. So a hearty thanks to you.
    March 24, 2010 at 7:58PM
    HAWordsmith: You are welcome Martin, though no thanks are needed. We are all here to learn something, whether it is about writing, ourselves, or something else entirely.
    March 25, 2010 at 3:02AM
    wholechild: I was thinking about you today, Memorial Day, and hoping you are doing OK.
    Shannon
    May 31, 2010 at 9:25PM
    SoldierPoet: It's nice to see a fellow soldier as passionate about poetry as I am. I also use it as a way to escape, even though only about 24% of my writing is military related.
    July 18, 2011 at 10:52PM
    HAWordsmith: Well, it is a little late, but thank you Shannon. I truly appreciate your thoughts and prayers. You are always in my thoughts and prayers as well.
    August 29, 2011 at 10:12AM
    HAWordsmith: @ Soldier Poet; alsoa little late, but yes, it is. There are a few more new additions as well this year, and I could not be more pleased.
    August 29, 2011 at 10:13AM
    TammyGail:
    Beautiful flower for a beautiful personā?¦.
    September 12, 2011 at 9:56PM
    HAWordsmith: Thank you! :)
    September 15, 2011 at 1:42AM
    cvcopac: I woke up this morning thinking of you. I don't know why. I'm not so good at social interactions but hope you're OK. You haven't posted anything in quite a while. Kenny
    February 3, 2012 at 8:11AM

 
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