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Don Alesi
Location: Northern, IL
Gender: Male
Interests: Writing, Flying, Kayaking
Member: Standard
Joined: October 2017
I just published my first book. "Letting People Down" Memories of a Cemetery Worker. ( I have written some stories about my flying activities have just begun writing my second book about my twenty five years of flying my vintage airplane all over the United States.
I love kayaking and hiking. I'm a Cemetery manager for a local township
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Don Alesi: The image I chose is of myself exiting a Mausoleum crypt after preparing it for an interment. It's a dirty job that I take pride in because it's the last thing I can do for a family and in some way the departed. It is also my cover picture for my book.
November 7, 2017 at 5:43AM
    damommy: What a coincidence. I worked as a funeral director before retiring. 8-)
    November 7, 2017 at 6:32PM

Don Alesi: I have recently joined this group and enjoy it very much. I'm having a problem writing reviews for other peoples work. I want to be objective yet I also want to encourage the writer.
I am in no way a professional writer. I barely got out of high school. I just enjoy writing for fun and publishing my own book was high light of my life.
November 6, 2017 at 7:11AM
    sandy montgomery: Few of us are professionals here. Most of us feel like you. The best reviewers look for spelling and grammar mistakes the writer may have missed. Then really it's all about your opinion. Beauty is in the eye of the beholder. Start reviewing a few peoples work that you like. It will give you practice before tackling the bigger stuff. Good luck ans welcome to the site.
    November 7, 2017 at 12:51AM

Don Alesi: I have started working on my second book. The first one was on my work at the Cemetery. This book will be about my flying adventures in my vintage Cessna.The audience will be for pilots and those who like to travel.

My questions is how much detail should I give about the places I have been to verses the actual flying part of my trips.
A large part of the book will be on how to travel in a small plane and what to expect along the way. I also want to write about all the wonderful people I have met.

John Steinbeck's "Travels With Charley" has always been on of my favorite books.

Thanks for any advise. As you can tell I'm just starting out to write on a regular basis.
October 26, 2017 at 5:51AM
    esacony: If you are what you do, then when you don't you aint.
    November 2, 2017 at 7:57PM

Don Alesi: What do writers think about writing as exactly as a person talks? For instance. I have only a year of College. I have written many things and have had some stories published. Sometimes when an editor cleans up my work my personality dose not come through my work and I'm disappointed.
When I published my book, I edited it myself. The only real complaint I received was that there were several grammatical errors. I explained that I do not talk in perfect English and I wanted my book to be as if the reader and I were having a long conversation. I would read the manuscript to myself looking at a mirror and ask myself, "Would I would really say that?"
Should I write as I wish or change my style to please everyone.
Any thoughts would be welcome.
Thanks. Don Alesi
October 23, 2017 at 5:59AM
    Bucketlist: I vote you stick to your style.You can please some of the people some of the time, but not all of the people all of the time (as they say. The grammatical errors shoul be a lesson, but develop yourself as a writer as you want.
    October 23, 2017 at 6:50AM
    nor84: Assuming that you're writing fiction, and that you're writing dialogue, then it should be whether or not the character would say it, not the author. If you write nonfiction, especially in first person, then I think you can do as you please. Grammar issues, though, can be jarring to a reader and should be fixed. It's about pleasing the reader if you want to sell stories.
    October 23, 2017 at 9:13AM
    Turtle... who?: I lean towards the belief that dialogue serves a purpose, and it should be cleaner, more to the point, or showing the essence of a character without becoming unreadable or flat or dull. Conversation in real life, read as conversation goes can be dull and pointless.

    If your dialogue ventures into the mundane of conversation, it can lose a reader's interest.

    If your dialogue is keeping the reader engaged, then it isn't a problem, if they can't read it, or it starts looking and sounding like bla, bla, bla ... then there's a problem.
    October 23, 2017 at 10:08AM
    Turtle... who?: Writing voice is a bit like dialogue. In the end, you have to balance if you are writing for an audience, or is the writing for yourself.

    The bigger the target audience, the harder it is to please everyone, but on the other hand, if you want others to read the work, you might need to consider making it appealing to them too.

    A tricky balance of writing how you want, and getting others to read.
    October 23, 2017 at 10:24AM
    Mustang Patty: A tip I just received from the editor I'm working with is this: Dialogue is open for dialect and slang. Proper grammar is important because, as it has been said, you don't want the reader to be distracted from it.
    Yes, Shakespeare and Stephen King do not always use proper grammar - but until you're as famous as them - follow the rules of grammar.
    October 23, 2017 at 12:01PM
    mrsmajor: Just for the very reasons you state, I know I will NEVER meet the qualifications that will EVER meet what some others will say...I say this..use your own voice, if it gives clarity to just what you are saying...One doesn't have to be famous to still become great..follow your own mind and heart...
    October 23, 2017 at 2:42PM
    nor84: While you can use dialect in dialogue, it's best to make sure it's readable, not gibberish. I tend to write about characters who throw in a common word in their language, and I rearrange so they sound as if English is a second language and drop a few gs from ing, rather than change word spellings to sound foreign.

    Cliches are fine in dialogue if not overdone, and so are grammatical errors and sentence fragments. It's the way we speak.

    I try to base the way characters speak on their educational level as well. Dialogue is fun to do. And, has been said, its purpose is to move the story along. It approximates, but shouldn't mimic the way we actually talk to one another. Leave out the chit-chat and the 'ya know' and similar phrases, or at least keep them to a minimum lest you slow your story too much.
    October 23, 2017 at 5:25PM
    FxstsLisa : A teacher once told a student, "I can grade perfect grammar 'A' papers all day long, but I cannot tell them apart. However, I know when I come across a unique storyteller because I don't have to look and see who wrote it." Good grammar is still very important or you can change the meaning you intended or confuse the reader. Thankful for all the 'grammar' help here on FS!
    October 24, 2017 at 4:50AM
    giraffmang: I dun no bout tis. if'in wee awl rite like dat in are own dislict and spullings, wear tis da cummen grund? I rekon moor impertint two be understud. if'in yea sea wot I meen...
    October 24, 2017 at 12:33PM


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