It is most difficult to conceptualize time as a thing. Time to me is like a measurement no different than say miles. Age, light years, the traveling of the Earth around the Sun. Each are measurements. Now there is abstract theories of time that probably run in the 1000's. You can bend light thus altering the light-time continuum. And as you say black hole distort time so magnetic fields may do the same. Poem was good!

This is a well written poem. You followed the contest rules. I prefer a different rhyming pattern that is a little more complex but that is not what was asked for. Good luck in the contest.

This is a very well written piece. It had a nice flow that was easy to follow. I guess if you gather addictions and sin and lump them together you get to a pretty dark place. I'm glad you were saved by the Lord.

-NIce image
and presentation.
-I like the style
of your poem, and
the descriptions you use.
-I like how you connect
a couple of the lines, and
then comment on them.
-My favorite image is
"an invitation to the rolling wheel."
-I also like the line about choices.
-Good luck in the contest.

Short but a necessity of the times I guess. This threw me off as I am not familiar with Martin Luther. Looking for autumn and finding a reform was odd. If I didn't read your notes this would have been puzzling.

Though this is a touching story, your poem reads like a newspaper article instead of a poem. You did however follow the format I didn't see a poem. It is a good story of survival.

This was different than I usually see. To use an ence rhyming all that way must have been fun finding all those words. Well done as it all rhymes. Ha, ha

A sad yet interesting piece. Kind of reminds me of an old man with saggy skin. The rhyming was good along with the meter. The ending kind of sums it up. If you can live with what you look like and others can't screw them.

I like that wording about façades unwrapped and soul revealed. That is the best way to live, and I believe we can only do it with God's help. Thanks for this excellent use of creativity and expressing a good message.
Bill

Ah, this dredges up all my fond memories of Dashiell Hammett, James Cain, and Raymond Chandler. The greats of noir detective stories.
There's always a dame mixed up in it.

Peace, Lee