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Yvon

victortouche
Thank you, dear.
17-Sep-2020
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A Concept Is? by victortouche

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It is most difficult to conceptualize time as a thing. Time to me is like a measurement no different than say miles. Age, light years, the traveling of the Earth around the Sun. Each are measurements. Now there is abstract theories of time that probably run in the 1000's. You can bend light thus altering the light-time continuum. And as you say black hole distort time so magnetic fields may do the same. Poem was good!


JLR
Yvon, thank you for the good wishes.
19-Feb-2020
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Spring Comes Soon by JLR

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This is a well written poem. You followed the contest rules. I prefer a different rhyming pattern that is a little more complex but that is not what was asked for. Good luck in the contest.


royowen
Thanks Yvon for these wonderful comments and a great review, blessings, Roy
18-Feb-2020
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Man's gods by royowen

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This is a very well written piece. It had a nice flow that was easy to follow. I guess if you gather addictions and sin and lump them together you get to a pretty dark place. I'm glad you were saved by the Lord.


Pam (respa)
You are welcome.
11-Dec-2019
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Moments by Yvon

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-NIce image
and presentation.
-I like the style
of your poem, and
the descriptions you use.
-I like how you connect
a couple of the lines, and
then comment on them.
-My favorite image is
"an invitation to the rolling wheel."
-I also like the line about choices.
-Good luck in the contest.


Susan Larson
Thank you. I was hoping ?fall? of the hammer tied in with fall/autumn.
12-Nov-2019
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Fall of the Hammer by Susan Larson

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Short but a necessity of the times I guess. This threw me off as I am not familiar with Martin Luther. Looking for autumn and finding a reform was odd. If I didn't read your notes this would have been puzzling.


Pam (respa)
Thanks for reading it.
12-Nov-2019
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An Inspiring Survivor by Pam (respa)

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Though this is a touching story, your poem reads like a newspaper article instead of a poem. You did however follow the format I didn't see a poem. It is a good story of survival.


Jannypan (Jan)
Thank you, Yvon, for your exceptional 6 star rating. Much appreciated. Respectfully, Jan
12-Nov-2019
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Two Turkeys by Jannypan (Jan)

Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

This was different than I usually see. To use an ence rhyming all that way must have been fun finding all those words. Well done as it all rhymes. Ha, ha


EricDaGoose
LOL thanks for your time to review this poem
12-Nov-2019
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Hound Dog Face by EricDaGoose

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A sad yet interesting piece. Kind of reminds me of an old man with saggy skin. The rhyming was good along with the meter. The ending kind of sums it up. If you can live with what you look like and others can't screw them.


Bill Pinder
25-Oct-2019
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Inner Soul by Yvon

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I like that wording about fa├žades unwrapped and soul revealed. That is the best way to live, and I believe we can only do it with God's help. Thanks for this excellent use of creativity and expressing a good message.
Bill


humpwhistle
Dashiell Hammett created Sam Spade, and Nick and Nora Charles (The Thin Man). Cain wrote Double Indemnity, among others. My local library keeps a collection of pulp fiction anthologies, so, I look them up once in a while. Peace, Lee
22-Oct-2019
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Dark Reflection by Yvon

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Ah, this dredges up all my fond memories of Dashiell Hammett, James Cain, and Raymond Chandler. The greats of noir detective stories.
There's always a dame mixed up in it.

Peace, Lee



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