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Sandra du Plessis
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Have a great day,
Sandra
09-Jan-2018
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Don't laugh, he said by Sandra du Plessis

Chapter 30 of the book Fictional Short Stories

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That's too funny, the exact same thing actually happened to a coworkers son lol. I loved the poem, excellent description and perfect formation!!! I loved the poem and thanks for the memory and laugh :)


phred
Thank you very much. I'm glad to hear you liked the chapter. :D
07-Jan-2018
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Two Quarts Low by phred

Chapter 2 of the book Newer World Order

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Excellent, excellent writing, while this is not my normal genera, I can appreciate the narration and you wonderful use of dialogues. I envy your style, wonderful submission and thank you for sharing!!!!


Cal Amborn
Thank you!
07-Jan-2018
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Code 4: Error 106 by Cal Amborn

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This is an excellent start to a story, it flows well, captured my interest and the plot ended nicely to draw the reader in. I hope to read more and see how this ends!! Excellent job!!!!


Marvin Calloway
Thanks for reviewing.
Your compliments are much appreciated. I wouldn't know where to begin, regarding teaching dialogue. I've been fortunate that most reviewers like that element of my writing.
I can't seem to submit a piece without screwing up the title of the story and the title of the chapter. I added a disclaimer to this submission but there must be an easier way, also known as the correct way of handling these items. (in FanStory's mind)
Marv
06-Jan-2018
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Crime in a suburb. by Marvin Calloway

Chapter 3 of the book Loophole

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I would kill to be able to write dialogues in such an effective way, excellent job!! The overall read flowed smoothly and was easy to read and follow. I'm not the best at grimmer but I didn't notice anything that stood out, wonderful submission :)


Sugarray77
Thanks so much!
06-Jan-2018
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The Reflection by Sugarray77

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Wow, from someone that loves to look into their lovers eyes, this was quite moving and powerful. I loved the imagery and simplistic way you captured such a profound emotion, excellent job!!!!!!


AshelinaB
Wow, thank you so much! :D
06-Jan-2018
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Covert Motivations by AshelinaB

Chapter 16 of the book Want and Resent: Plunge

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While this is not my normal reading genera, I can appreciate your talent as a writer and loved the ease and flow of your writing. You have a style that is both unique and universal, Simply put, I loved it!!! Keep up the good work :)


Dolly'sPoems
Thank you for your kind review, I have known some people build their houses to incorporate the tree rather than cut it down to build their house, the tree lives inside the house! How good is that! Love Dolly x
06-Jan-2018
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Trees by Dolly'sPoems

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I loved this poem, especially the "Her roots embed under your shed," This takes me back to my childhood!!! Poetry has a rear quality about it that allows us in few words to capture something profound. You did this perfectly, thank for sharing :)


apky
Thank you for dropping in to read and review, Tango494.
I certainly look forward to have you with me and my work as regularly as you wish.

Happy New Year,
Apky
28-Dec-2017
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The Loved & The Cherished Part 3 by apky

Chapter 52 of the book Golden Shana: The Capture

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Wow!!!! I love your use of dialogue and the ease with which I could read this. You definitely have a talent and I'm looking forward to reading more!! Thank you for sharing:)


Jm4805
Thank you for the lovely review
28-Dec-2017
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Digital Love Part 10 by Jm4805

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Excellent submission, very well thought out and well worded. I love the easy flow, awesome job!!!!! I would recommend your work to others and I look forward to reading more!!!!


AshelinaB
Oh, thank you! :)
27-Dec-2017
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Forces of Nature [Ending A] by AshelinaB

Chapter 3 of the book Puppy Love and the Storm Above 2A

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Excellent narration, I loved your use of dialogue, I wish I had the same talent. The flow was easy to follow and it was a good read. I'm honored to be able to review and read your work :)



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